Well, I have an ideas book, and I've recently decided to combine these three ideas into one big one, if that makes any sense at all. I've got the opening paragraph, but I'd really like an unbiased opinion on whether or not I should scrap it and come up with a better one or not. Any comments, help, or anything whatsoever really will be appreciated!
Her gaze filtered onto him. She was watching him intently. His aim was planned, his hands were raised in the manner of hesitation, and concentration was etched across his brow. Her eyes moved, following the movements of his fingers. He raised his finger, pressing the coloured block lightly. The light came on.
It was coming towards her. She could see it, barely, but she could definitely hear it. Everybody could hear it, it was coming towards all of them. It was a roaring sound that seemed to waver in and out, gradually becoming more and more pronounced, and then fading into a low, dull, echo. Now though, it was really becoming louder; it was drawing closer.
She glanced down at the child next to her. She was yawning, her form laying upon the iced pavements, her breathing slow and gentle. The woman sighed, giving one last glance at her daughter, she stepped out. And screamed.
The roaring sound became louder, and then faded away.
She eyed him coldly, ashamed at what he had done. They held eachother's gaze for a moment before she turned and walked away, leaving him. He stared after her, shaking his head.
Thankyou's in advance!