Due to the good reaction I got to the story I posted here a few days ago, I've decided to include it in my portfolio for Creative Writing at uni but I'm unsure of a phrase. The phrase is
They slump into the uncomfortable plastic chairs exchanging the usual Monday morning vomiting of eye contact for kisses.
Does this work? Do you understand what I mean? Is there a better way to put it? Should I take it out altogether?
Thanks for your time.