Just read Lucky, by mikepryo. My God, it's powerful.. that's pretty much all I can say. It made me cry.
my silent undoing | December 7, 2005 - 02:19
Hi.. just joined the site. Please read the poems that I've submitted; I would appreciate your criticism. Thanks -
mikepyro | December 7, 2005 - 02:38
Hey man thanks for that review. I read ur poem love and two others. They're not bad at all. And the rhyme doesn't go too much. Keep it up.
my silent undoing | December 7, 2005 - 03:17
I'm not much of a poet, I know. I just write down whatever comes into my head. I think my problem is that I don't edit or revise.. I just write it out straight, then leave it at that. I tell myself that it makes it more honest, pure, etc.. but yeah, my output is shabby at best. But your poem.. really, I can't express enough how much it got to me.
mikepyro | December 7, 2005 - 05:13
No what I meant was ur rhyming isn't forced like some poets. well thanks for the review though I like this one as my favorite of my six poems
perfectofilia | December 7, 2005 - 12:09
i read lucky and i too thought it was very powerful, especially for a 14year old to be writing!
Doors I think that your poems are amazing aswell, i know how you feel, just writing down what you are feeling, that is what i do!
Hope to see more poems from both of you!
mikepyro | December 8, 2005 - 00:46
Hey doors u got one of ur poems reviewed on the board to great job! Oh and thx perfect. I jus put on two other poems. One's light and happy but the others depressing and sad.
mikepyro | December 9, 2005 - 00:15
I just wrote another poem called the "Ice Harvest". It's my favorite of mine.
mikepyro | December 10, 2005 - 06:19
I would like to thank all who read this tragic poem. Thank u very much.
If ignorence is bliss I'm the happiest kid on earth.
steve_j_1985 | December 11, 2005 - 17:45
Really imaginative and deep, Mike. I can't quite believe you're 14. Keep it up, I like the more melancholic stuff such as 'Lucky', so get to work and give us some more!
mikepyro | December 11, 2005 - 20:15
Thx Steve. I'll try my best.
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