Ode to Venus

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Ode to Venus

i
Your comely light shines bright -aright-
To ring a vibrant resonant;
Forth from my deepest bleakest self;
By wings that sing with an ardent
Need, that bleeds’ with a deep desire.

ii

In your sublime celestial
I rest; teething upon your milking breast;
As you allow my savant hands,
Into your buried bedded dampness.
To then digest your sacred, undressed
nest.

iii

Slowly I revive refined and ready;
For from this sacred sable place,
Where bonded seeded souls do rest,
I’ve spent my time entwined, enriched
By your plum pleasured deep caress.

iv

I… my rest abated, but when I wake,
I feel locked and lost in shock!
For, it is not your sacred ivy eye
I spy, as slowly my sloth leaves.
It is another….

v epilogue.

And as we meet along the time aged street,
Our eyes they never nestle together.
Our words wash wanly from us;
Each with whiffs of whispers hanging;
Wrestling with a murmur of a ready hope,
That the promises we weakly made,
Could- just perhaps- easily be broke..?

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Comments

Auntie-Ann | June 19, 2010 - 22:34

Can you explain this please? It can interpreted in many ways and I would like you take on it :-)

alphadog1 | June 20, 2010 - 06:55

Err. Yeah... Tutor wanted me to write a piece of poetry fuelled with sexual tension. The more I added the higher my mark.. I was writing the Damocles effect at the time; and reading a lot about the planet as a fertility symbol... Also in the background were other issues floating through my mind.... I guess deep inside I am a lesbian... Or at least want to be one; which coming from a man is kind of weird. :-). I feel embarassed now.

Auntie-Ann | June 20, 2010 - 11:06

Not weird at all, it's more common than you realise. Also there is no need to feel embarrassed, it's cool and you certainly did what the tutor asked. Be proud of your work!! :-)

alphadog1 | June 20, 2010 - 14:25

I am proud of this peice.

Auntie-Ann | June 20, 2010 - 14:28

So you should be! :-) xx