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We spent many warm summer nights,
simply twisting threads of echoes;
Into clustering meadows of starlight.
While throwing our tender passions,
Upon the little gods of this world.
Oh how we sought each other's heart;
Hoping that this too brief a time,
Would never set us so far apart;
On a new sad day of reckoning.
Walking barefoot, I felt so naked.
Just raw...like dragged ice within.
and, as my numbed tingling feet,
graced this sand climbed shoreline;
I earnestly, desperately prayed
that this night would never end.

I recall In looking ever outward,
with wonder in our now opened eyes;
How we stared with sheer delight,
onto the twilight of the night.
And witness the stars play a melody,
To the delicate tempest of our love.
We grasped... our hands held tight...
And...in sheer awe resplendent...
We saw the moon slowly begin to wane
into the silver boiling of the sea.
But with sadness, I noted the line...
the glowing light of the golden dawn,
that marks the ever constant change
of tender night to sun kissed day...
And how...your whispered kiss
left its gentle mark upon my cheek,
As your spirit gently carried you from me..

for Blessing... wherever you may be.

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Comments

thecure | November 13, 2011 - 18:39

That was beautiful, I love the imagery

Blessing | November 13, 2011 - 23:13

Loved this alphadog1. Just a few typos - should be: echoes, resplendent and majesty or majestically depending on starfields or starfield's. Might think a bit more about your placement of commas and fullstops in the first verse. Loved it all the same.

alphadog1 | November 16, 2011 - 18:39

ok thanks Blessing, dear friend. :)

alphadog1 | November 16, 2011 - 20:24

I made some changes. If you don't like it, I'll revert it. Its my way of saying thank you for your kind thoughts and words... I have found that words heal people... wars are won and lost in words...

Blessing | November 17, 2011 - 19:50

It would be very pleasing if you kept both versions aphadog1, having their own particular nuance. One Love

alphadog1 | November 17, 2011 - 19:56

ok :-) one love xoxo

alphadog1 | November 17, 2011 - 21:44

not a problem.

alphadog1 | November 17, 2011 - 21:44

not a problem.

Highhat | November 18, 2011 - 12:38

Some beautiful imagery in this Poem. Well done.