How missed you are in the wilderness,
shadows flexing their muscles,
reaching, clawing... trying to stop you
from travelling into light.
Shut your eyes- just ignore them.
How Heavenly your face appears in front
of me, glowing in the night. I look and see
you're howling in the midnight rain, seeking
a companion.
Your hair has grown so much longer,
than it was before. Your eyes they seem
so still and shallow to the core. I pray
your soul will awaken and rise to visit me.
I feel as though I am shrieking, into
nothing but the air, your presence is
astounding, I feel you by my side again.
Love, that lasts a life time, doesn't
root within the earth, its shoots will
forever be watered with my sombre tears.
Cry as time is too cruel, moves too
fast or too slow, changes everything.
I am as I always was, you are with the
atoms, maybe you can touch me and
reassure me of your presence?
Do I ask of you too much? Love.
I'm calling, crawling, falling now.
It is the two of us that have passed.
For surviving without you is unendurable,
and you cannot bare to leave me again.
Comments
rjnewlyn | March 31, 2010 - 23:17
Amazing as always. Particularly the 'you are with the atoms' image. Something at the back of my mind is wondering whether this is about vampires but I hope not because I'm rather fed up with them! Best left unexplained - works very well that way.
It's possible that there are a couple of typos but can I put in a plea to leave them as they are because they work rather well. I like the idea of 'shrieking into nothing' (in case you meant shrinking), and I like the 'you cannot bare to leave me again' (in case you meant bear). If they are accidents then they are inspired ones and there's a noble 20th century tradition of allowing random effects into art that's worth preserving.
shoe | April 1, 2010 - 10:33
I can not choose a favourite stanza, each is excellent, one of the best poems I have read in ages,
enjoyed immensely.
Silver Spun Sand | April 1, 2010 - 10:39
Beeme - I agree with all that has been said;-) A
beautiful poem and Thomas Hardy - one of my favourite writers.
Enjoyed, very much;-)
Tina xx
Beeme | April 1, 2010 - 15:44
Thankyou very much Rob, I'm glad you enjoyed this so much and the typos were accdients, I shall leave them as they are. :-)
Beeme xx
Beeme | April 1, 2010 - 15:45
Wow, thankyou so much Shoe! I'm over the moon at how much you enjoyed this. It means alot.
Beeme xx
Beeme | April 1, 2010 - 15:47
Thankyou Tina, he is one of my favourite's too. Abit depressing but I love the rhythm of his work.
Beeme xx
MistakenMagic | April 1, 2010 - 16:32
'Cry as time is too cruel, moves too
fast or too slow, changes everything.'
- beautiful lines, Beeme. This is such a wonderful piece, both raw and heartfelt. There's emotion in every word and I felt all of it. Well done on this one ;)
Magic xxx
Beeme | April 1, 2010 - 17:13
Thankyou so very much Magic. I'm glad you enjoyed (:
Beeme xx
rjnewlyn | April 1, 2010 - 23:47
Ah yes, but there are no such things as accidents. They were clearly meant to happen!
Beeme | April 2, 2010 - 14:40
it seems that way (:
Nolan | April 3, 2010 - 22:46
Well done Beeme! I believe you are maturing as a writer &&
"For surviving without you is unendurable,
and you cannot bare to leave me again."
Spell checkers and spelling!
Nolan | April 3, 2010 - 22:52
Apology! I see Rjnewlyn has already noted.
Keep well!
Beeme | April 4, 2010 - 11:24
Thank you very much Nolan, yes Rjnewlyn spotted the typos.
Beeme xx