She could not part with her dream
that one day you would love her,
that one day the stars would shine brighter
and the moon would land in her grasp.
She could not part with her dream
and just listen to the ocean's song,
without wishing you were near her,
across the blue lagoon.
She could not part with her dream
that one day you would love her,
that one day you would hold her
and her hope was most beautiful.
Comments
MistakenMagic | August 24, 2009 - 09:57
Awwww a very touching poem, Beeme. Is this autobiographical? I think most girls have been there - I know I have, too many times :p I think the repetition works really well and I love:
'that one day the stars would shine brighter
and the moon would land in her grasp.'
Magic xxx
Beeme | August 24, 2009 - 14:07
Thank again magic, yeah i suppose it is autobiographical :) Glad you enjoyed this one XX
threeleafshamrock | August 25, 2009 - 10:36
...'and her hope was most beautiful.'
So is this poem, well done.
I tried to read your I.P. 'Behind' but the page won't load; have you taken it out again?
Chris xx
Beeme | August 25, 2009 - 10:42
Thank you so much Chris, glad you enjoyed. It's back up now, I didn't think it was very strong, let me know what you think, thanks again :)
Beeme xx
Cavalcaderl | August 25, 2009 - 22:16
New Beeme
My comment didn't go must forgot
press submit.
Wow what a cracker! your poem
"She could not part."
from beginning to end.
I can't catch the moon, but I'll
keep on dreaming.?
this is so romantic beautifully
thought out.You know you are good.
DO NOT CANCELL ANYTHING
Julie xx (:-
Beeme | August 26, 2009 - 10:05
awww thank you so much Julie, I'm glad you enjoyed this one. I wont cancel anything lol ;)
Beeme xx