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The Tear

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Published by Bradene on October 31, 2008 - 17:48
from the ABC set Family Life

I remembered something tonight.
Something she told me
after you passed away.
It didn’t signify then,
yet tonight
it seems important somehow.
She said-
as you breathed out
your last seconds of life
a tear trickled down your hollow cheek.
It occurs to me now
I wish I knew, who,
that tear had been shed for.
The children?
All the wasted years?
Could it have been for me?
Yourself?

If only I had been there at the end
to hold your hand.
if only I had been stronger,
if only.
If…

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Nathan Bednarek | October 31, 2008 - 18:53

I love the structure of this poem; I can almost see the tear trickle down. This is a very touching piece dear Val and how personal it must be. Great work.

Nathan.

Silver Spun Sand | October 31, 2008 - 19:44

This is so poignant, Val. It must have been hard to write. Such a beautiful tribute.

Tina x

shoebox | November 1, 2008 - 05:40

It's a very interesting write. Enjoyed so thanks for posting.

Bradene | November 1, 2008 - 11:44

Thanks Nathan, it is personal and causes a lot of disquiet, but I think writing out ones pain is a useful way of dealing with it,Val x

Bradene | November 1, 2008 - 11:46

Yes it was difficult to get it down and for it to say what I felt without going OTT which sometimes happens no matter how you try. I hope it hasn't happened here. thanks Tina Love Val x

Bradene | November 1, 2008 - 11:47

Thanks Shoebox, glad you enjoyed this piece. Val x