I want to be in god's
places of nature
where the light
and warmth so bright
Angel's with smiling faces
butterflies magnificent
tinted wings
I could be called the
painted lady
nocturnal of the night
The waning full moon watching over me
peeping
through the trees
Bees humming a tune
of let there be love
and peace in the world
Rabbits with snow on
their twitching noses
nightinggales singing
all chirping away
Children with bright colour
coats and hats
with skipping ropes
jingle my name
Waterfalls with
tinkling rushing sounds
Sunsets of red
and orange hues
gently emerging down
Low behind the houses
at a blink of an eye
what a lovely sight
I would quickly
take a seat
pick up my pen
start writing again
Of the beauty and things
I have seen
and people I meet
all comments please.
Comments
insertponceyfre... | January 3, 2011 - 09:03
There are some lovely images in this poem Julie. I particularly like the last part.
There are a couple of typos:
angels, faces, rabbits, coats, hats and sunsets. None of these need apostrophes.
happy new year!
Cavalcaderl | January 3, 2011 - 14:40
new insertponceyfre
Thankyou lovely 1st comment.
and now corrected what are they called
typos: ugh! not bad for an O.A.P aye!
HAPPY NEW YEAR to you and all.
had bit to muich of our Peach Wine,
so sweet, don't feel effects till going home.
thankyou. Hope your well, bug is on and off.
julie xx
skinner_jennifer | January 3, 2011 - 17:46
Hi Julie,
what a wonderful place you take the reader to, it's
a delight to read your work. There is'nt one
paticular line I like best, I just love the poem as
a whole.
Thankyou for taking me to your paradise.
Happy New Year to you.
Jenny.
fatboy74 | January 3, 2011 - 21:43
Really enjoyed this one too Julie.:-)
Cavalcaderl | January 4, 2011 - 00:25
new Skinner_jennifer
Hi! wow what a compliment,
I did a little giggle cor?
I found a bit on back envelope,
thought may not done,on hear so
re-added it, bingo. did you have a good
Christmas and see New Year in. We did for once,
daughters christmas day,and invite new year,whoops
over done with our Peach wine, I even saw two lights
in sky,shouted Ray get camera quick,then formation six above houses, low flying high! no not quite tipsy,real,could be chinese lanterns, maybe fireworks.Great time.
Paper says, eclipse to-morrow 7.15am-9am. May be up
look if sunny. Hope your well,sorry Editor Tony bad
flu. Ray had cough week and cold ok now.
I have taken out typos as advised by insetponceyfre,
kindly said, definitely reads much better.How are you.Like reading yours and all, amazing kinds of ideas and works authors. Mind doesn't come out want it.
Happy New Year to you and all.
julie xxxx
Cavalcaderl | January 5, 2011 - 00:01
new fatboy 74
Missed your comment,sorry.
Thanks, glad you liked it.
I believe there is a butterfly
called The Painted Lady.Beautiful colours.
Also word in dictionary says, diurnal=erect
winged insect. But big name,I am learning?
Happy new year.
julie xx
Nolan | January 17, 2011 - 10:23
Julie excellent! Happiness!
& Nolan!
Cavalcaderl | January 17, 2011 - 21:35
new Nolan
H! Happy better new year
Glad you liked it.I to amze my self sometimes read it again.
been looking for your great poems.
How are you.Well done poem kind of called
Breathless (IP) wow within half an hour
a cherry appeared quickest ever.But now have added
bit to it,hope not over done it.Great night London
Editor AbcTales t.cook (Tony) and author's I met,and
gobsmacked read two.Hectic at first Gatwick tanoy suit case on front of train given out,so closed my eyes and prayed safety and passengers,within 5 minutes tanoy voice again not as bad as thought and current won't have to be cut off,train can move on.phew! Under ground tube chnaged lost Ray out on road of exit shoutimng for him,was behind me thank goodness don't travel that far on own.The platform as
jump of tube train some in a circle getting pass nearly fall on the track,man shouted out the way and me mind please get by.
I wondered where you got to on here.
julie xx