A piece of charred wood,
a black smear, curved,
straight line running behind
for the taught tendon,
like just before he ran
and I gave chase...
see how the firelight animates him,
lends a shadow so he may run again,
listen to his grunting
his heavy breathing
as he picks up your scent
and casts a suspicious eye
in your direction,
where you are crouching,
poised and still;
he knows you are there,
smells your scent on the air...
but you are ready
spear gripped in hand,
always letting the prey decide
when you are to move...
Comments
jolono | July 4, 2012 - 17:56
Liked this Dan,very original. Lots of imagery here.
Dan Ryder | July 4, 2012 - 19:38
Thank you Jolono.
Dan.
shoe | July 5, 2012 - 10:16
I love these lines;
'A piece of charred wood,
a black smear, curved,
straight line running behind
for the taught tendon,
like just before he ran
and I gave chase...
see how the firelight animates him,'
Striking imagery.
Rigel | July 5, 2012 - 11:26
A striking poem in its entirety.
Rigel
Sooz006 | July 14, 2012 - 12:37
Lovely slice of history. Well written and story-telling.