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A piece of charred wood,
a black smear, curved,
straight line running behind
for the taught tendon,
like just before he ran
and I gave chase...
see how the firelight animates him,
lends a shadow so he may run again,
listen to his grunting
his heavy breathing
as he picks up your scent
and casts a suspicious eye
in your direction,
where you are crouching,
poised and still;
he knows you are there,
smells your scent on the air...
but you are ready
spear gripped in hand,
always letting the prey decide
when you are to move...

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jolono | July 4, 2012 - 17:56

Liked this Dan,very original. Lots of imagery here.

Dan Ryder | July 4, 2012 - 19:38

Thank you Jolono.
Dan.

shoe | July 5, 2012 - 10:16

I love these lines;

'A piece of charred wood,
a black smear, curved,
straight line running behind
for the taught tendon,
like just before he ran
and I gave chase...
see how the firelight animates him,'

Striking imagery.

Rigel | July 5, 2012 - 11:26

A striking poem in its entirety.

Rigel

Sooz006 | July 14, 2012 - 12:37

Lovely slice of history. Well written and story-telling.