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Posted by ellydawn on February 4, 2008 - 14:34

I am full
of emptiness
all form
no substance
My talent wasted
I am number 13
of 100,000
I am 0.9%
of the 90
the invisible
now visible
a magic act
in 3 parts
the Greek say
I lack desire
but I say I
desire too much
and if beauty
lies within then
I am pure
untouched
unsoiled
immaculate
I would have
been a better
candidate for
the role of Eve.

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Comments

kim.rooney | February 4, 2008 - 15:14

I really like the roll of this and its insistence. The last line sublime.

edmund allos | February 8, 2008 - 00:07

I agree. that last line is a haunting idea. It has left me feeling sad, which for me is a signifier of emotional engagement with the piece, which is what we all want, isn't it. Great poem.

edmund allos | February 8, 2008 - 00:08

and the title is spot on...I forgot to say!

josephine.serieux | February 25, 2008 - 16:33

i love it :)