America, please
let your paper-heart bleed
for the poor.
So what if it kills you?
Published by ju B on February 15, 2012 - 11:05
Comments
Stan | February 15, 2012 - 20:33
Quite.
scratch | February 15, 2012 - 21:50
I read this earlier. Was affected by it ju B. My initial thought was 'too short', but there is something about it that drew me back. That is always something that should ring the 'quality' alarm bell. 10 words provoking a thought.... Well done.
ju B | February 15, 2012 - 23:05
it's not what i wanted to write really. but the meaning's there, so it'll do. thank you scratch & Stan
:)
scratch | February 15, 2012 - 23:20
Ju Be. Sorry if it was lost in the translation, when I said quality alarm bell I meant to say high quality alarm bell. I liked it. :-)
ju B | February 16, 2012 - 22:54
OK scratch- it read right, i took it as a compliment, thank you. but I'M disappointed with it. someone once described me as a "punch-in-the-stomach" writer. & that's what i want to do with the America thing, but it won't go right. i just got to find me an angle, i know. it's just so frustrating.
scratch | February 16, 2012 - 23:11
It's not my thing but have a look at delapruch's stuff you might find a kindred spirit?