Talking Pond

I love it!

Here is a nice video for you and your excellent poem:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WjkQWIVEJto

thanks *dances around*

Did you mean 'inkled' or was it supposed to be 'inked' repeated?

Love this:

'where silver statuettes
fountain fresh ripples
on a talking pond;'

oooh the alliteration and the soundscape in those lines is just delicious!

J x

I liked this, but thought the end let it down a lot !.

inkled - *sweats* is it spelt right? yep, inkled, thanks Jennifer, glad you liked, im shuffling through and editing at the mo :)

Excuse me but the end is perfect. Littleditty, I hope you're not editing this one!

Hilary - the end let it down? I like it - suppose its a sense of humour thing..

Oh hello Crackers -yes i liked that ending - happy to see alternatives of course.

Inkled, I think it means warp-faced, I had no problem with it. Onomatopoetically speaking it's fine, if it derives from inkle. OW, you should edit it.

Hilary - rather than simply saying you think the end let it down, why not tell ld why you thought that, which might help in an edit?

I personally thought the ending was great, so simple and so effective.

ld - inkled / inked - I don't understand the meaning - do you mean the answers are 'inked' as in written down and then it is able to gain an 'inkling', hence 'inkled'?

J x

It's the 'burp' I don't like.

jenn, yes, like that, an inkling, from what is written down or observed.

hilary - Ganesh sometimes burps i think, bubbling ponds like this one, do for sure - poems do, so -excuse me! thanks for commenting, i'm reading yours :)

You say 'Bubbling' ponds. This is what occurred to me. I'd have used 'bubble',although you have already used it ! Gobble ?

Ha! gobble is an idea - but Ganesh, an elephant, god, gobbling? i dont know - trumpetting? snorting is too sarcastic, burp, a little burp? I LIKE THESE BURPS!!! thanks hilary :)

I like the burps!

Ok, I get the inked/inkled thing now - think I might be slightly hungover...

J x

Stick to your guns littleditty !

:)

Well I didn't have an inkling about inkled before; but I guess I do now:-) And there is nothing like a good burp as the mood so takes one.

Loved this, ld. Now it's back to washing floors.

Tina:-)xx

lol - im washing sheets, glad you liked - back to the Spring Cleaning for the both of us Tina, G&T and JD when we're done :) will have a reread of yours later too xx

*burps*
xx

is that better dear?

Burp. A good word, onomatopaeic, relatively new in origin (1932 according to Etymology-on-line, but what do they know?). Let's hear it for this kind of language in poetry...

But it's nowhere near as delicious as 'inkle', of which - heretofore - I had nary an inkling.

Lovely poem LD.

Ewan

Another burp? well really...where are our manners?inkle is a cute word, 1535-45 origin unknown - glad you liked, cheers Ewan :)

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uRZkLfzpFeI&feature=related

I thought that in India a burp and burping is GOOD MANNERS at the table. Only Germans overreact and consider it bad manners. This is a Goa poem, you have written amazing poems when you were there such as Jigsaw etc and that other one with the snakes (translated into Greek too)?! Remember? Is it here?

burps are ok with me -the Snake? i read it today - yes its here - come to think of it, there are more burps in Gallery which i wrote with Jigsaw and Canvas - thanks for the edit you did of this one, its about a pond in Bali really, did i write it in Goa? Goa Poems, Disturbance of Shen, Blessing, The Shawl, reminds me of Goa. Cheers nIc xxx

http://www.abctales.com/story/littleditty/snake

I like the unpretentious ending. You brought it down to earth with a burp.

Love it! Welcome back LD ;) I thought the ending was the best part, change nothing, keep chiselling!

Chris XX

chuck, thanks, down to earth with a burp! makes me think of hot air balloons, and parachutes, and Chris, thanks, but i didnt go anywhere, im here doing a spot of editing, glad you liked the poem :)

:-)It is a pleasure to read your work Little D, you have a keen eye (and ear) :-) atb L

thanks L, ive just had another read of your super Spring one, a feast -this is more a snack -glad you enjoyed :)

Such a magical, mystical poem ld, crammed into so few words. Brilliant ;)

Magic xxx

Another cherry and I am not surprised!

Well done, this is amazing.

Nathan.

Nathan and Magic - thank you -happy you liked - a cherry is good and sweet for a poem that wasnt cherried before - infact, i may burp! xxx