You are locked away
Behind sea
And the wreck of an airplane
Behind masses of bloody bodies
Part incinerated
Part decomposing in the hot sun
I could never reach you in time
If I had a warning
It would be all over
Mobile phone or not
A world of data
At our fingers
Could not save you
You are inaccessable
If you are by me
Now a hundred fold now
You are away
Your life
Your children sledgehammered
Into safe zones and red tape
Slapped behind steel doors
Reinforced
Buried under mounds of
Concrete
You had no grave
No burial ceremony
Honey
Baby
My sweet baby girl
Come home safe
Call me when you can
I'll text you in the meantime
Comments
Sooz006 | August 1, 2012 - 15:22
Mobile phone or nots... I read this as knots with the reference to the sea. Would maybe, mobile phone or not, make it easier to read?
This is beautiful, I can only imagine what it would be like to lose a love one in a disaster. The ending is really touching.
magicdarer | August 1, 2012 - 17:24
Thank you Sooz for your very sensitive reading. You are very generous with your time, I am touched.
magicdarer | August 1, 2012 - 17:28
I never thought this would get cherries, I almost wanted to delete and re-write. Still not 100% sure why, but glad it has been flagged up so it gets a few more reads. Thank you!
shoe | August 1, 2012 - 19:47
Please don't delete this poem, it's fabulous.
Cavalcaderl | August 1, 2012 - 22:30
new magicdarer
No don't delete, I agree with shoe!
Seems quite bit of sadness in though!
Well written. last stanza makes me feel it's true!
But well written could be wrong!
Well deserved cherries!
I feel you mean,mobile phone or not!
Makes poem correct! I think!
julie x
magicdarer | August 1, 2012 - 23:00
new Cavalcaderl
Thank you for you reply!
And your kind words!
Sadness is from the heart!
Struggled with this poem!
Fortunately have never lost any one close like this!
Aweful thing to happen!
Can't imagine!
Tried to imagine and images came!
Felt not worthy of cherry but magicdarer think again!
So many nice comments!
Technology a wonderful thing!
And fearsome!
carl x
magicdarer | August 1, 2012 - 23:05
If you say so shoe. x