Sleeping, Sleeping City

I really like this. The burglar, the rapist the car jacker, all the people up to no good lurk the city at night along with the nursery rhyme monsters, all out to steal a child's innocent sleep in one way or another. Lovely poem.

I'd only make one change ... in this world of commercialism where everything has a price on the last line I'd have her buying the child a lullabye, not a diamond ring.

Beautiful,

'All gingerbread scented and milky way safe.'

we'd like it to be like that always wouldn't we!

Wonderful writing, marion;-)

Tina

Hi Sooz, thanks for your feedback, I see what you mean with the commercialism, a lullaby would be a refreshing change but the line is a reference to that song mama's gonna buy you a mocking bird...and so on...I think I meant the last line to be a question...a lot of commentators cited poverty and frustration as the underlying causes of the riots so I guess I wanted to comment on that too, but in a questioning sort of way....but then again, lullaby has a lovely ring to it (no pun intended!) and still raises the same question...thanks! :)

Thanks Shoe, it'd be lovely wouldn't it...I wonder what sort poetry such safety, peace and contentment would produce? Interesting thought :)

Thanks Tina :)

Hi Marion, loved this poem too. I think Sooz made a really good suggestion above – lullaby in place of diamond ring. Really enjoyed, you expressed your sentiments so well. Many congrats on cherries.

Trev

Thanks for welcome feedback, edit has been made! :)

reads like a beautiful fairy tale prayer...loved it

Thanks moonphish, that's a lovely comment.

Marion, I really enjoyed this poem. All the best. Richard.

Hi Richard, Thanks for your comment and thanks for stopping by :)