Eva

Well captured. I like anything that connects to the wars (as you know) and I could picture Eva's face which makes it all the more real. I don't know what it is but I always seem to have sympathy for her...no good reason I suppose; weird!

Enjoyed this Magic - only 8 more days to go now for the bubbly ;) XXX

Hey Chris! I can't help but feel sympathy for Eva - after all, she never actually joined the Nazi party. But I don't want to turn this into a mass debate - I'll just make it clear here and now that I in no way sympathise with the Nazi party, as should be obvious by my Holocaust poetry.

I just really enjoyed writing about a character whom history has never really given much attention. I've read Carol Ann Duffy's 'The World's Wife' and that's what inspired the poem.

I know, can't believe how close my 18th is! Just been so preoccupied with uni paperwork etc! But glad you'll be waiting with the bubbly Chris ;)

Magic xxx

Me too - Magic;-)

An inspired write.

Love this stanza especially:-

"He always hated the habit anyway.
She’ll kick his dog, for good measure,
on her way back inside."

Well done, again and may all the uni paperwork go smoothly. It'll all be well worth it in the end...and some;-)

Tina xxxx

Wonderful. I love the imagery here, but I am mostly impressed by the structure of the poem and it's increasing pace, length of lines, even the tone is somehow growing in the poem. The poem feels almost obsessive as it develops, as if it moved from mere nagging to fits of anger- interestingly, the anger is both direct and camouflaged, as if ‘Eva’ didn’t really know how to feel. A very effective poem and of course it highlights your expertise- history ;-)

Well done.

Nathan xox

Thank you Tina! Yes, that stanza really stuck in my head when writing this poem - the idea for it was greatly inspired by the film 'Downfall', as was a lot of the poem.

Hello Nathan! I can't seem to keep history out of my poetry! The geek in me lives on ;)

Magic xxxx

Long live the Geek! ;)

Haha thanks Chris :P Can you imagine what I'm gonna be like at uni? hehe

Magic xxx

Excellent poem Magic. Although I confess I have absolutely no sympathy for her she is still a compelling character. xxx

hey Magic,
I really enjoyed this, I loved all of the atmostphere that builds up, great write :)

I especially love;
"She imagines she’s far away, a garden somewhere -
Munich maybe, back when she was seventeen.
The knots of her fists uncoil - her fingers too short for nooses."

And the last lines are amazing!
Well done on the well deserved cherry!

:D
Beeme XX

You'll find you are surrounded by them there ;)

Hey, Sarah! I completely understand where you are coming from, but I agree 'compelling' is a word I'd use too ;)

Beeme - thank you for the comment! The poem really grew backwards from the last two lines so I'm glad you like them!

Chris - you're probably right ;) Maybe I can find a nice nerdy boyfriend - or shock horror - a poet boyfriend!

Magic xxx

Just popped back to say many congratulations on the cherry, Magic;-)

Tina xxx

Thank you Tina!

Magic xxx

my goodness, do i start by commenting on the poem or commenting on the comments? i agree with nathan about the structure and build up in the piece. it not only works, it defines the poem...makes the whole deal work. know what i mean?
"The knots of her fists uncoil - her fingers too short for nooses." - probably my fav line, but the last line is a close second. excellent job and congrats on the cherry!!!

i didn't know your birthday was soon, and me fresh out of pineapples. i think you will feel right at home with all the other geeks at uni...look how well you do here with us geeks. one final note: you and a poet boyfriend conjures up images of beautiful words swirling during love and forked tongues during anger. interesting, indeed.

jason (the Rogue Half-Rhyme)

Hey Jason! Thank you so much for your wonderful comments :P Yep, my 18th is on the 9th October - this Friday and the champagne's on me ;)

Magic xxx

New Mistakenmagic
well done on the cherry
and coming age 18th soon
your soon be partying,and dressing up!
and cherry cocktails.

This is great suspense
pills in the box of the flower beds
and cyanide creepy.
beautully concocted.
julie xx (:-

Thank you Julie ;) Yes, I've got my outfit sorted for my party - it's a little black cocktail dress :p

Magic xxx

champagne and a little black cocktail dress!!! i live in on the wrong side of the ocean!

jason (rogue half-rhyme)

MISTAKENMAGIC MANY CONGRATULATIONS AND A VERY HAPPY 18TH BIRTHDAY To-morrow October 9th..
have a Wonderful Day and Time.
Tell me all about it
your look amazing..
Julie xxx