No Evil

i would cut the last line? i think without it, the question is implied - the question appears in the readers mind after reading the poem.

Hi there, Magic.

I have to agree with ld, i.m.o. the last line is superfluous and somehow dilutes what is otherwise an extremely powerful poem.

I must admit also, when I first read it, I had not noticed this line at the end. If I had, I would have echoed ld's words, without a doubt.

I like your astute variation on the theme of 'hear no evil, see no evil, speak no evil'.

No one really knows the origin of this phrase. Some say it comes from Japan in a place known as the Sacred Stable, where there is a carving of three wise monkeys. and that the monkeys were carved as a visual representation of the religious principle, if we hear, see, or speak no evil, we ourselves shall be spared evil.

Back to your poem again and I consider this another extremely worthy piece to add to your impressive collection. Well done!

Tina xxx

It's been snipped :) Thank you so much for your feed back girls! And I completely agree, sometimes I forget to make the reader do a little work themselves!

:-)

Tina xxx

All in all I think this has been an excellent collaboration! Well done ladies :)

Magic xxx

'the labyrinth of limbs
curling in the mass graves,'

For some reason these lines scare me- they're great! As is the poem ;-)

Nathan.

Thanks for stopping by Nathan! Your reviews are always so lovely :) Glad to have you back at last.

Magic xxx