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Published by Parson Thru on May 23, 2012 - 20:24
from the ABC set Parson Thru II

Just friends, no more
and if we pushed too hard
it wouldn’t be the same
we’d inflict pain
and after sex
we'd have our first row
and everyone would know
we’d gone too far somehow
and soon we’d hurt the ones
who are always last to know
and then we’d loathe ourselves
and hate each other
for taking things too far
but then it’s all too late
we’ve dealt the blow
we’d walk away
and never speak again
to the friend
we never got to know

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Comments

scratch | May 23, 2012 - 21:11

I like this parsons.

I can quite see why you have included the second stanza but a part of me thinks that it wasn't needed (in spite of its edge and humour). The first single stanza is excellent - one to be proud of. This is simply a subjective and personal opinion on an already good poem, thanks for sharing parsons.

Denzella | May 23, 2012 - 21:13

Hello,

I'm no poet but I think Scratch is right as the last four lines of the first stanza end the poem's message on a powerful note.

But hey what do I know. Only that I enjoyed it very much.

Moya

Parson Thru | May 24, 2012 - 07:30

Hey! Thanks scratch and Moya. You've got me in a quandary now. [Minutes later] I think I was worried about taking myself too seriously! [Hours later] Hi scratch and Moya. No, I think I am trying to make a serious point with those lines, but maybe not very well. Will sleep on it. Thank you both. [Morning!]

Parson Thru | May 24, 2012 - 09:23

Morning!

jolono | May 24, 2012 - 09:59

Much better Parson, it was good before, but Scratch and moya are right, it didn't need the last bit. It's brilliant as it is!

Parson Thru | May 24, 2012 - 19:00

The beauty of ABC-ers comments. Thanks jolono. Thanks all. Lovely comments and a great help.

Parson Thru | May 24, 2012 - 19:02

The above poem was brought to you by scratch, Denzella, jolono and Parson Thru.

jolono | May 24, 2012 - 19:31

The next big thing since Take That!

shoe | May 24, 2012 - 20:02

Darn! I didn't get to read the first version... but love the hell out of this one!

Parson Thru | May 24, 2012 - 21:04

Thanks shoe. For completeness, the bit I took out was:

But if you grew a beard
or I grew tits
there’d be nothing
in the way of us
loving each other to bits

See? They were right!