Lines of travel
stationary.
Steel wheels roll onward
rapidly.
Brief cold touch
as gaining speed.
Train tubes moving
over land.
Run straight;
high speed; gaining ground.
Heading for a
destination.
Reserved seat people
occupied.
Avoiding contact
knees and eyes.
Some get off as
neon lights
stream through
black tar, starry nights.
Soon to reach a
Railway Station.
Comments
camilla | November 18, 2007 - 11:24
The problem is that it is so difficult to find a new angle and brand new images about a train journey.The linear form reflects rails but I feel the images need to be expanded.I fairly recently submitted an "I thought" different train poem to a competition where one got feedback from a famous poet.He clobbered the train poem because it was too familiar a subject.
raysawriter | November 18, 2007 - 13:49
Hi Camilla
I'm new to the site so I didn't know about the point of inspiration. Still finding my way around.
Thanks for your comment.
I wrote it on a train journey to pass the time away. I agree there are only a certain number of things you can do with a train journey.
All the best
Ray
raysawriter | November 18, 2007 - 13:49
Hi Camilla
I'm new to the site so I didn't know about the point of inspiration. Still finding my way around.
Thanks for your comment.
I wrote it on a train journey to pass the time away. I agree there are only a certain number of things you can do with a train journey.
All the best
Ray