I went down to the sea to be near you;
your voice sprang from the waves.
The lightness of your touch – spray
that drifted with the wind; your smile
spiked the air. Your body shone
the luminous light of blue petrels.
Warm still to my touch, those grey-pink
stones, where we sat when I wrapped
you in a towel – your head, shouldered
and shy. I went down to the shore
to be near you; the closest I could get...
to where the sea cradles the sky.
Comments
jolono | June 26, 2012 - 19:08
Rigel this was really good!
Rigel | June 26, 2012 - 21:50
Thanks, jolono
Rigel
MistakenMagic | June 27, 2012 - 13:24
"to where the sea cradles the sky" - what a brilliant image! Loved this Rigel - but I'm always a sucker for poems about the sea ;-)
Magic xxx
skinner_jennifer | June 27, 2012 - 17:12
Hi Rigel,
this was a wonderful poem. I found myself drifting,
reminiscing of times gone by, of precious moments standing on the seashore.
Anyway back to reality. I'm so glad I read this
piece and thankyou for sharing.
Jenny.
Rigel | June 27, 2012 - 19:07
Thanks, Jenny.
As for sharing, you are more than welcome.
Rigel
Rigel | June 27, 2012 - 19:09
Magic - the line you picked - the 'crux of the matter' so to speak. You are obviously a 'born poet'.
Thank you for taking the trouble to read and to comment so positively.
Rigel
sue dinum | June 27, 2012 - 20:32
Just had to take in another one of yours and I thought this was brilliant too. Again, such lovely sentiments and romantic imagery. I loved it all, but this really got me...
Warm still to my touch, those grey-pink
stones, where we sat when I wrapped
you in a towel – your head, shouldered
and shy.
Luvly-jubly!
Best regards
Trev
scratch | June 27, 2012 - 23:42
Why has nobody mentioned the Petrels for goodness sake? That's a great image you've given us Rigel; well done.
Rigel | June 28, 2012 - 12:46
Cheers, Trev. Much obliged to you.
Rigel
Rigel | June 28, 2012 - 12:47
Pleased you thought so, scratch, and that you noticed those Petrels.
Rigel
Denzella | June 29, 2012 - 07:06
Rigel,
This is such a lovely poem. I don't consider myself a poet but I picked out the same line as Magic because it is...magic!
Wonderful!
Moya
Rigel | June 29, 2012 - 18:49
Good afternoon, Moya. Your lovely comment, a breath of fresh air, on an otherwise muggy day at the office.
Rigel
Rigel | June 30, 2012 - 08:58
Just a quick and heartfelt 'thank you' to the cherry fairies, wherever they may be right now.
Rigel