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Snapshot of my brother

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Published by seashore on February 4, 2011 - 15:45

Your photo
shows you looking
straight at the camera

With that smile-for-the
photographer look

And your hair sticking up
in places it shouldn't

Just the same
as when you were
my child-brother -

You still look younger
than me though
of course you're not..

Now seeing you again
all I feel is pity

None of it was your fault,
you didn't know - and

I'm sorry it's been
so long, too long.

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Comments

SundaysChild | February 4, 2011 - 17:25

This is wonderful- I have reasons to relate to these words and it has touched me greatly. Thanks for sharing. xx

seashore | February 4, 2011 - 17:50

And thanks for responding with your words, much appreciated. xx

celticman | February 4, 2011 - 17:52

I liked the spaces in this portrait.

Silver Spun Sand | February 4, 2011 - 19:08

A gem of a poem, Coral;-)

Tina

Beeme | February 4, 2011 - 19:20

very emotive and extremely beautiful Seashore, the last lines are just perfect :] xx

seashore | February 4, 2011 - 19:29

Thank you very much celticman.

seashore | February 4, 2011 - 19:30

Thank you so much Tina - your feedback always appreciated. Coral

seashore | February 4, 2011 - 19:32

Thank you Beeme for that lovely comment - it means a lot.

Thanks for the cherry eds.

insertponceyfre... | February 4, 2011 - 19:38

I agree with celticman- what a good way of putting it. Brilliant seashore

seashore | February 4, 2011 - 23:08

Thanks a lot insert.

fatboy74 | February 4, 2011 - 23:19

Last three sections are very poignant and this works so well overall. ATB fb

seashore | February 4, 2011 - 23:29

Thanks a lot FB. Just read yours - snap!

Geoffrey | February 5, 2011 - 10:01

Back to the weepies. Well done on cherry.

seashore | February 5, 2011 - 10:12

Afraid so, sorry about that Geoff, but have to go with what comes up and I guess this is my way, if you see what I mean.

skinner_jennifer | February 5, 2011 - 12:04

Hi seashore,

enjoyed reading this poem, it sounded quite
emotional.

Congratulations on the well deserved cherries.

Thanks for the read.

Jenny.

seashore | February 5, 2011 - 12:45

And thanks to you, Jenny, for reading this and for your kind comment.

ScoZen | February 6, 2011 - 17:48

ScoZen
Seashore, hello.
Very short but says a lot.
It reminds me to get in touch with family before its to late.
Regards

barryj1 | February 6, 2011 - 21:41

What's left unsaid here is equally as important as the well-chosen details. Again, as in the past, I really appreciate the open-ended, stoy-like quality of your poetry.

seashore | February 9, 2011 - 11:34

ScoZen - thank you very much for your kind words, much appreciated.

seashore | February 9, 2011 - 11:38

Barry - as before I thank you for leaving feedback. As you know, it means a great deal to me. Sorry for delay - short break from writing to spend a couple of days with my younger daughter. Best wishes, Coral