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The Larks Song

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Published by shoe on April 20, 2010 - 12:39
from the ABC set Some kind of poetry

How we wantoned ourselves away
on each other,
eagerly gulping down every morsel,
we never even tasted them.

We prised apart our sea urchin hearts
and spoon fed each other the delicate flesh,
licking the salt from our lips.

We spoke of love with larks tongues,
singing the chorus over and over.

Now we find ourselves here,
dry mouthed in the dark, the salt stinging our eyes,
unsated, spent, consumed by love.
And the lark sings her heart out, over and over.

Impotent thunder rumbles, increasingly distant.
Mud cracks in a hundred places and we breathe in dust.
We wait, hungry for the storm to break.

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Comments

Luly Whisper | April 20, 2010 - 16:57

Wonderful, so eloquent.

shoe | April 20, 2010 - 17:30

Thank you Luly.

Highhat | April 20, 2010 - 18:20

I think it is mighty fine- exactly rich and yes eloquent

shoe | April 20, 2010 - 18:34

Mighty kind of you to say so, ;~]

threeleafshamrock | April 21, 2010 - 14:47

Clever Shirley and a bit sexy; which can't be bad ;) I liked this a lot

Chris ;)

rjnewlyn | April 21, 2010 - 22:31

An amazing succession of images. Love and food is always a good one but I liked particularly the last stanza which takes it well beyond just 'good'.

MistakenMagic | April 21, 2010 - 23:48

These lines just blew me away:

'We prised apart our sea urchin hearts
and spoon fed each other the delicate flesh,
licking the salt from our lips.'

and

'Mud cracks in a hundred places and we breathe in dust.'

Really well done on this one, Shirley!

Magic xxx

shoe | April 22, 2010 - 11:55

Thanks Chris, hmmm sexy, pleased you thought that,:~}

shoe | April 22, 2010 - 11:58

Thanks for the encouragement rj, I was least sure of that stanza, so I'm thrilled you thought it better than good, your thoughts are most appreciated.

shoe | April 22, 2010 - 12:02

Magic, I re-wrote those lines a dozen times, so I'm really glad they worked for you, I think they may be my favourites also. :~}

kheldar | April 27, 2010 - 23:43

You take the written word and charge it up with emotional tension. Really well done.

David xx

shoe | April 28, 2010 - 11:29

Thanks David, I worked quite hard on this one, so chuffed really that it worked for you, xx