“As the stars that shall be bright
when we are dust, moving
in marches upon the heavenly plain,
as the stars that are starry in the time
of our darkness, to the end,
they remain.” L. Binyon (1869-1943)
‘For the Fallen’
I had come to the borders of sleep...
In my head, I walked to the window –
gazed at far-off worlds, with other suns,
other moons...other people, just like me;
if it’s true our universe is infinite
as some would believe.
I had come to the borders of sleep...
‘Sleep,’ they begged me...and if I did,
maybe to dream of a galaxy – aeons
away, and witness its demise; see it
implode, to become nothing more,
nor less, than a raindrop dispersing
in a woodland pond...
I had come to the borders of sleep,
and heard black-stockinged footsteps
padding through my mind...on down
that road to nowhere...another's hand
reached out for mine and in my head
we walked to the window...
noticed the streetlamps stutter
and so die; watched the morning star
tug, with all its shimmerings,
at nights such as this, when truth
heals our wounds...outshines the light
of who we thought we had to be.
Comments
SundaysChild | July 2, 2011 - 14:03
Beautiful!
Silver Spun Sand | July 2, 2011 - 14:04
Many thanks, Sundays;-)
Have a great Saturday.
Tina
SundaysChild | July 2, 2011 - 14:06
Thank you Tina! I'm going to be making flower head garlands today to take to a craft fair tomorrow :) Enjoy your day xx
Silver Spun Sand | July 2, 2011 - 14:09
I'm hopeless at making stuff like that, but I am sure yours will be pretty as a pictue. Hope the craft fair goes well tomorrow. Pity it's not round my way;-)xx
skinner_jennifer | July 2, 2011 - 17:13
hello Tina,
what a great idea for the IP, I love the idea of
gazing off into space and wondering what is out
there. Love those lines:-
I had come to the borders of sleep...
'Sleep,' they told me...and if I did,
maybe to dream of a galaxy - aeons
away, and witness its demise; see it
implode, to become nothing more,
nor less, than a raindrop dispersing
in a woodland pond...
I love the comparison of galaxy imploding,
like the raindrop dispersing in a pond.
Brilliant.
Jenny.
maisie | July 2, 2011 - 19:31
i think i'm with jenny with the stanza she posted!
this is a poem that feels to me as if it might benefit by a change round... a stronger start with jenny's stanza - perhaps?
loved the end too.
Silver Spun Sand | July 2, 2011 - 19:38
Thanks for reading, maisie, and for your thoughts. More than appreciated;-)
Tina
Silver Spun Sand | July 2, 2011 - 19:38
Pleased you enjoyed this one, Jenny. Astronomy, always one of my passions;-)
Tina
rjnewlyn | July 3, 2011 - 22:58
Wow - this is wonderful. Amazing images (for me particularly the black-stockinged padding footsteps). Definitely one of your best.
Rob
Silver Spun Sand | July 4, 2011 - 08:50
Many thanks, rob. I guess the 'Wow' factor is what we're all looking for;-)
Have a good week.
Tina
L G Meadows | July 5, 2011 - 08:12
A very dreamy poem if you will pardon the obvious pun. It does have a dream like feel and I love it. Ok, have to ask, what does the I P stand for?
Silver Spun Sand | July 5, 2011 - 08:58
Thanks so much for reading this one, LG. Pleased you enjoyed;-)
As to your question, you have a very good point, if you will pardon the pun. 'I.P.' stands for 'Inspiration Point'. To further explain. Each week, either Tony Cook or one of the editors, pick a prompt...could be a word, a phrase, or an idea, to get the creative juices flowing in us would-be authors. If you look on the Home Page, under Inspiration Point, you will see what I mean. I have to say it is my saving grace...suffering, as we all do from time to time with the dreaded 'writer's block'. This week's was to incorporate the phrase 'I had come to the borders of sleep'.
Hope I have been of some help, and thanks once again for your kind comments.
Tina
L G Meadows | July 5, 2011 - 12:37
Well cool, will look that up!
Thanks!
Silver Spun Sand | July 5, 2011 - 16:04
Please do, LG. It certainly helps the old brain cogs keep whirring;-) Tina
Kahdai | July 7, 2011 - 12:14
Great one T! :)
Silver Spun Sand | July 7, 2011 - 12:26
Many thanks, K!;-)
seashore | July 7, 2011 - 17:06
How on earth I missed this I'll never know.....one of your very best, Tina!
Silver Spun Sand | July 7, 2011 - 17:18
Thanks, Coral. Pleased you thought so;-)
Tina