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from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

“Tell me – do you believe
in reincarnation?” she asks,
bathed in a four o’clock sun
slipping home before
its curfew.

“I’m in two minds,” I reply,
“but I take it that you do.
So, surprise me. What
or who will you return as?”

“I’m torn between a bird
or a ballerina. Pavlova, reborn,
perhaps; wowing the crowds
with her Dying Swan.
Do you think me odd?”

A wry smile on her lips, cracked
and dry; wrists, matchstick thin –
manacled by wires hooked up
to contraptions that would defy
her will to die.

“No,” I answer. “Not odd at all.
In fact, I will lead the applause
and settle for nothing less
than an encore.”

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Comments

ScoZen | December 1, 2011 - 21:23

Beautiful.
A nice reminder for me to light up a candle in my local Hospice.

skinner_jennifer | December 1, 2011 - 21:53

What a sad but beautiful piece of writing, you
touched my heart with this one Tina.

Thankyou for sharing.

Jenny.

marionwozere | December 1, 2011 - 22:42

Wow, this is so beautiful; the way the tone suddenly changes at:
'A wry smile on her lips, cracked
and dry; wrists, matchstick thin –
manacled by wires hooked up
to contraptions that would defy
her will to die.

So well crafted, right to end, which made me cry because I could just see her there.

Silver Spun Sand | December 1, 2011 - 22:47

Thank you, Sco Zen...especially for the candle;-)

Sand Lady

Silver Spun Sand | December 1, 2011 - 22:47

Many thanks, Jenny;-)

Tina

Silver Spun Sand | December 1, 2011 - 22:49

marion - thank you for reading, and for your words.

Tina

seashore | December 2, 2011 - 11:11

Wonderful piece of writing. A tough time of year for you I'm sure, Tina.

Coral x

Silver Spun Sand | December 2, 2011 - 12:21

Yes, it is Coral. Thank you for remembering;-)

Tina

sue dinum | December 3, 2011 - 14:57

Excellent, full of feeling and sincerity. So clever in so few lines. Well done, Tina!

sue

Silver Spun Sand | December 3, 2011 - 15:19

Thanks, sue;-) Tina