In the hall deep underground
stealthily moving not making a sound,
the Wizard moved in a hooded robe
he held in his hand a magic globe,
the only sound that he heard
came from the winged magical bird,
that sat in the globe
he held under his robe,
looking around he suddenly found
a torch on the wall of the underground hall,
attentively he proceeded again
the only light came from the torch light flame,
when out of the dark a shadow came
it was the Beast without a name,
he roared like thunder rising with a cry
the Wizard shook as he held the globe high,
"be gone from here Monster, Beast
for my bird is a dragon
that comes from the east,"
but the beast just roared
he stood his ground,
so the Wizard dropped the globe
making a shattering sound,
the splintered shards flew up in the air
then entered the Beast who cried with dispair,
the Wizard called for the Dragon
to come to his aid
on his command the Dragon obeyed,
the Wizard said, "I want the Beast to die,"
so the Dragon breathed fire in the Beast's eye,
as the Beast stood burning, crying in pain
the Wizard said, "you will never scare again,"
and from the ashes and the flame
the Beast was never seen again.
Comments
Sooz006 | March 18, 2011 - 08:39
I could imagine this being read to a class of nine year-olds and them hanging on every word, as long as the teacher had the kind of voice that would whisper it secretively in parts, and boom it out in others and accentuate the magic. Couple of places where the rhyme stammered, but a captivating story that kids would love... Even if you're now going to tell me that, I'm an ass and you're offended because it's clearly about lost love, or a deeply significant appraisal of ecconomic decline, or the fall of the Roman empire or some such. It flows well (apart form those tiny stammers) This would be perfect for illustration, lots of blues and reds and orange flames. What I like about this is that the imagery is so clear that you can actually see how the pictures would look. Poetry is rarely going to be to my taste, but for those who love it (and so many do) I can see that this works well. Nice one Jen.
Silver Spun Sand | March 18, 2011 - 12:59
Pure magic, Jenny;-)
Tina
Highhat | March 18, 2011 - 16:31
Yes this is very magical Jenny- I can almost see a Poof of smoke rising in the air in some dark castle corridor- very atmospheric
;)Pia
skinner_jennifer | March 18, 2011 - 17:19
Hey Sooz006,
this is a great comment thanks, I really never
thought of it like that, but now having read it
again, I can see exactly what you mean.
I'm certainly not going to tell you you're an an
ass, neither am I offended, you made me laugh again,
it's all purely out of my imagination, thinking
about Wizards and Beasts and underground tunnels.
I am very glad that you enjoyed reading this poem,
considering you don't normally read poetry.
Thanks again for dropping by.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | March 18, 2011 - 17:20
Hi Tina,
glad to have given you a little magic to read.
Thanks for reading and a great comment.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | March 18, 2011 - 17:24
Hi Pia,
I love that idea, 'a poof of smoke rising in the
air in some dark castle corridor.' What a lovely
way to describe this poem, thankyou for reading
this poem Pia, I really appreciate you taking the
time to read and comment.
Jenny.
insertponceyfre... | March 18, 2011 - 20:37
some really good imagery in this poem Jenny
sue dinum | March 18, 2011 - 22:00
Very clever, Jenny. And I agree with Sooz... the kids would love it. Well done!
sue
skinner_jennifer | March 19, 2011 - 11:24
Hi Insert,
thankyou for your comment, I like those words,
'good imagery,' thankyou for reading.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | March 19, 2011 - 11:26
Thanks sue,
all I have to do now is find some kids to read it
to, perhaps I'll read it to my partners grandchildren.
Anyway sue thankyou for reading and your great
comment.
Jenny.
Kahdai | March 19, 2011 - 14:46
Great rhyming to this, it very magical! K
skinner_jennifer | March 19, 2011 - 17:00
Thankyou Kahdai,
it's very kind of you to read and give such a nice
comment.
Jenny.