Come step out of the shadows
show me who you are stranger,
fall into the poetry of life
let me delve into your soul,
for your silent affections
in all honesty and truth...are
a mystery to my enquiring mind,
please do not move automata
responding like a machine...
let me hear your melifluous -
silvery-toned...honeyed voice,
do not babble so with paper and pen,
for we embrace the resonance of your
elusive qualities that are yours alone,
let us not be curious strangers - but
quench our thirst with a shared goblet
of words we can exchange face to face,
like the feline is menaced with fear
by its own dark...reflected silhouette,
do not be afraid - none of us has the
perfection - but we all have greatness,
move from out of the darkest corners
so that we may savour precious moments,
we could indulge in childhood fantasies
take pleasure in creative - imagination,
two free spirits not afraid to shine on,
for just one moment do not be afraid
to seek me, we can forget who we are
and indulge in a sensory feast...feel
the rain ripple over our bodies - as
we writhe across sodden grass - our
clothes drenched with the morning dew -
as we sip some of the dawning glory...
stretching out before us...a new day,
let us hope that by the giving
which we can both share...we
will recieve what we contribute
in all honesty and truth...but
not by deceit...nor by despair,
as we anxiously await the fruits
of pleasure in our ever open minds,
your letters remind me of rosebuds in May
so don't remain concealed like scared mice,
for like Alice we are curious to know you
as to your charming appeal we are intrigued,
your letters silvery laced with intimacy...
appealing to our eyes your words of charm -
strange and mysterious lady whoever you are,
let us meet at a place of choice...amble our
way through leafy park...run barefoot across
the downs, time with your Bohemian Stranger.
Comments
maisie | July 12, 2011 - 19:11
hi jen this is good, I caught a spelling - indulge rather than endulge? lol, i think i did... could be wrong...
yeah :) good work
insertponceyfre... | July 12, 2011 - 21:12
let me hear your melifluous -
silvery-toned...honeyed voice,
that's a wonderful line!
Silver Spun Sand | July 12, 2011 - 22:17
This is wonderful, Jennie...and represents many hours of hard work, I am sure. (just a tiny typo should be 'deceit'.)
Loved this stanza,
..."your letters remind me of rosebuds in May
so don't remain concealed like scared mice,
for like Alice we are curious to know you
as to your charming appeal we are intrigued,"
Many congrats on this, Jennie;-)
Tina
Highhat | July 13, 2011 - 08:21
Yes it flows really well- such an endearing rhythm and tone. I thought you did really well on this Jenny- it's just perfect. There are a lot of lines to pick out- too many so I will just say that it is brilliant on the whole.
;)Pia
skinner_jennifer | July 13, 2011 - 11:55
Hi maisie,
thankyou so much for helping me out, you were right
about that spelling mistake.
Anyway I'm really glad you enjoyed reading.
Thanks for the comment.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | July 13, 2011 - 11:56
Hi insert,
thankyou for letting me know you enjoyed and for
reading. Always appreciated.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | July 13, 2011 - 12:00
Hi Tina,
yes I did spend a lot of time on this poem, infact
the words didn't come easy, it was very kind of you
to notice.
Thankyou for your help, I've now put that word right.
It's very kind of you to read and I too love those
lines you pointed out.
Hope you're having a good day.
Jenny.
fatboy74 | July 13, 2011 - 12:01
there are a number of wonderful lines here jenny - my favourite being:
your letters remind me of rosebuds in May
I love those words. Thanks for a lovely read. :-)
skinner_jennifer | July 13, 2011 - 12:02
Hi Pia,
thankyou for reading and letting me know your thoughts, I'm glad that you enjoyed reading this
piece, it's kind of special to me.
Thanks again,
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | July 13, 2011 - 12:05
Hi FB,
it's great that you read this, I was hoping that
you would, because it's nice to get a males
perspective on the piece, as it's a man who is
writing the letter.
Thankyou for reading and letting me know that you
enjoyed.
Jenny.
Cavalcaderl | July 13, 2011 - 14:48
new skinner_jennifer
What an amazing way of words.
The stanza I like as many here.
Do not babble so with paper and pen
for we embrace the resonance of your
elusive qualities that are yours done,
let us not be curious strangers-but
quench the thirst with a shared goblet
of words we can exchange face to face
Brill: Images and ideas of life!
julie xx
skinner_jennifer | July 13, 2011 - 15:09
Thankyou so much for reading julie,
I love your comment and appreciate your words a lot.
Glad to know you enjoyed and thankyou for telling me.
Jenny.
RachelPatricia | July 15, 2011 - 10:04
So rich in beautiful imagery, this is, Jenny, and these are my favourite lines -
'please do not move automata
responding like a machine...
let me hear your melifluous -
silvery-toned...honeyed voice,'
- a stunning poem, indeed :)
Thanks for a wonderful read, hope you are well and enjoy your weekend,
Rachel xx
skinner_jennifer | July 15, 2011 - 11:58
Hi there Rachel,
thankyou for taking the time out to read this piece,
it's very much appreciated.
I'm glad that you enjoyed reading it. Thankyou for
letting me know.
You have a great weekend too.
Jenny.