Seeking her Utopia

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from the ABC set Poems

Like a
whirlwind
she dances
with great
merriment,
her hair with
amber glow
cascades
taking flight,

she moves
to the
rhythm
as if in
a trance,
an endearing
energy of
effervescence,

body lithe
twirling...
shimmering
round their
blazing
camp fire,
as the fiddler
plays to her
burning desire,

gestures tell of
thoughts not
always clear,
a snippet
of a chant,
her fragrance
exotic...eager
to please...
a landscape
of dreams
only her
people see,

to flourish
under a soft
corn moon,
her loved ones
to blossom
and bloom,
kisses soft
as morning
dew on
moistened
grass...lips
to touch
soft skin,
as sweet
juices flow,
like biting
into a
ripe pear,

her blessings
are many,
blending
light...
movement
within the
dance,
as the pretty
young girl
seeks Utopia,

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Comments

jacques07 | August 9, 2012 - 11:40

This is a really nice poem Jennifer. I enjoyed reading it.

Regards,

Jacques

skinner_jennifer | August 9, 2012 - 12:01

Hi there jacques,

thankyou so much for your kind comment.

You would never believe this poem came from
eating a ripe juicy pear would you? but it did.

Really appreciate you reading.

Thanks again.

Jenny.

jolono | August 9, 2012 - 12:22

A ripe juicy pear? Is that a euphemism Jenny? Well I never!

A great read full of imagery and character, well done Jenny!

Silver Spun Sand | August 9, 2012 - 12:24

I agree with all that has been said, Jenny. A truly vibrant poem...full of life and movement.

Very much enjoyed.

Tina

Highhat | August 9, 2012 - 12:26

I imagined a Gypsy princess.. this really took me on a whirlwind dance with this lovely lady.. fantastic- thanks..

;)Pia

skinner_jennifer | August 9, 2012 - 12:38

jolono I will set the story straight, eating a
ripe juicy fruit pear and really enjoying the
refreshing taste, I have never been so refreshed,
ha...ha!

Glad you liked this one and thankyou so much for
letting me know.

Jenny.

skinner_jennifer | August 9, 2012 - 12:42

Hi Tina,

I loved that word 'vibrant,' it kind of sums up this
poem. I certainly tried to get movement into it,
with a story to tell.

Your comments always cheer me up. Thankyou so much.

Jenny.

skinner_jennifer | August 9, 2012 - 12:45

Hi Pia,

they say two minds think alike and you know you're spot on with a gypsy princess, but I thought I'd leave it open for the reader to imagine whatever they see.

Glad you enjoyed this one and thankyou so much
for letting me know.

Jenny.

sue dinum | August 29, 2012 - 20:35

Hi again, Jen. Sometimes I am literally dazzled by your facility with words. It’s quite amazing. And I like the physical look of this poem; it has a pleasing narrow form. And I really like the last bit especially:

her blessings
are many,
blending
light...
movement
within the
dance,
as the pretty
young girl
seeks Utopia,

Lovely!

Two excellent pieces of work that I have read today of yours, Jen. Keep rocking (and writing), baby.

Trev

skinner_jennifer | August 30, 2012 - 10:43

Hi again Trev,

I really appreciate your kind words. This one was
kind of special to me, as it was going into my
story, but then I decided to put it as a poem on
its own.

Yes I will keep rocking (and writing). Thankyou so
much for taking the time out to read.

Best wishes.

Jenny.