Aboard the ship I will stow,
the sailors they all wish to know,
from whence I came as I move below,
and whencesoever I care to go.
"Across the sea I wish to flee,
with silver sails guiding me,
to feel the wind, to be free,
this I think is ecstasy.
I care not where my vessel travels,
adventure, mystery then unravels,
when seas are rough,
and times are tough,
I'll hold on steadfast,
till my bodies had enough.
I come from a place,
that I hold dear,
my parents will miss me,
of this I fear,
I'd like to see the wonders of Kashmir,
of this I feel is very clear.
At some unknown and unspecified time,
I'll write a poem with rhythm amd rhyme,
of cobbled streets and people I meet,
the market place is a real treat.
And if by chance I meet you there,
we'll take the sites without a care,
before I take my leave once more,
to sail away to another shore."
Comments
Highhat | January 10, 2011 - 18:50
You did really well on the rhyme Jenny- there is a good flow to it and the subject matter is enthralling. A lovely poem.
;)Pia
MistakenMagic | January 10, 2011 - 21:39
I love the wonderful rhythms you've created here, Jenny - I can almost feeling the rocking of the ship on the sea's waves! Love the ending too :)
Magic xxx
insertponceyfre... | January 10, 2011 - 23:11
yes, I think this flows beautifully too - well done!
skinner_jennifer | January 11, 2011 - 10:29
Hello Pia,
thankyou so much Pia, you've made my day.
Jenny. xxx
skinner_jennifer | January 11, 2011 - 10:30
Hi Magic,
I take your words as a true compliment, coming from
someone who writes so well.
Thankyou so much.
Jenny. xxx
skinner_jennifer | January 11, 2011 - 10:31
Hi insert,
thankyou so much for your lovely comment, it's
much appreciated.
Jenny.
fatboy74 | January 11, 2011 - 12:20
I think this is great Jenny - doesn't feel forced and takes the reader nicely along on the journey. well done. :-)
Silver Spun Sand | January 11, 2011 - 13:06
I agree with all that has been said, Jenny. A compelling rhythm throughout. Much enjoyed;-)
Tina
skinner_jennifer | January 11, 2011 - 16:19
Hi fatboy74,
wow! thankyou so much, it really is nice to get such
a great compliment.
Jenny.
skinner_jennifer | January 11, 2011 - 16:21
Thankyou Tina,
it's always nice, when you get so many nice
compliments. Thankyou again, much appreciated.
Jenny.
ScoZen | January 25, 2011 - 18:01
ScoZen
Hello Jennifer.
I have arrived at this little seafaring tale a touch late for a comment.
I liked it.
"...I care not where my vessel travels,
adventure, mystery then unravels,..."
Ahh, a sense of adventure, adrift...
Regards
skinner_jennifer | January 27, 2011 - 14:51
Hi ScoZen,
I am so glad of your comment, I am very happy that
you liked this poem.
Thankyou so much for reading and commenting.
Jenny.