Cut, cut.
Away with this rotted flesh that has long since
lost all the nerves that mark a man as alive.
Gone is the warmth and flush of blood in veins.
All that remains are bones wrapped in shrink-wrap,
forced by some thing unseen to mime the
actions they were once accustomed to.
There is no thought left, no consciousness;
only vague whispers of the past reside here.
Cut, cut.
Remove the old growth to let something new
and unhaggard, something worthy, take its place.
Set fire to the forest so that the seeds take root.
Beneath this plaster they call skin lies the
propensity of rebirth. That is what I seek.
A rejuvenation of Body, and from this
Mind, and thus Spirit, as the three
cannot exist independently.
Cut, cut.
Remove what once was, and let what should be take its place.
Comments
seashore | May 17, 2012 - 09:42
Am I an idiot? Hope not, can't be as I echo what you've said and wish I'd written it....
StJimmy | May 17, 2012 - 15:20
Oh, the idiot thing was more about these people on another website where all they do is whine about how no one knows what "true" poetry is. I wrote it with pissing them off in mind, but it's still meant for normal people to enjoy. And I'm glad you liked it!
SundaysChild | May 17, 2012 - 21:06
I really like it
scratch | May 18, 2012 - 21:27
As do I. Very, very good.
StJimmy | May 18, 2012 - 22:04
Thank you SundaysChild, and you as well scratch!
StJimmy | May 18, 2012 - 22:55
As I said in the description, this was posted on a brutal poetry critique site. So far, it has garnered only one comment. Here is this gem:
"Hello,I almost hesitate to comment on your poem because it strikes me as either you are a cutter or are considering it. Or perhaps you're thinking of death. In any case, I read this poem as rather disturbing and if you do have some problem and this is a way of reaching out, I think this isn't the best place to get some help."
Raventongue | May 22, 2012 - 04:08
So essentially, they knew so little about poetry that they couldn't even tell it was supposed to piss them off.
StJimmy | May 27, 2012 - 00:52
Pretty much. They take everything so fucking literally it drives me insane. For example: "I'm thinking leprosy and gangrene. In both cases I think they are not capable of miming past actions. And, I do not think cutting gangrene off results in regrowth. The limb is gone for good. Find a different comparator." Someone just dropped me that little note.
StJimmy | May 27, 2012 - 00:52
Pretty much. They take everything so fucking literally it drives me insane. For example: "I'm thinking leprosy and gangrene. In both cases I think they are not capable of miming past actions. And, I do not think cutting gangrene off results in regrowth. The limb is gone for good. Find a different comparator." Someone just dropped me that little note.
Raventongue | May 27, 2012 - 02:22
Wow, christ that's a dumb comment. You've met some real grade-A losers here.