MAKING LOVE
She moves like some
grass bug woman
god naked from sex
sacrificing her heart
for one moist kiss
closed in my warm rhythm
stiff
wet
belly magic
a hard thrusting animal
squirming
in her
hot bone fever
Comments
Stan | December 9, 2011 - 22:09
Mmm. Good choice of words, and striking images. Made me sit up and take notice, anyway...
scratch | December 9, 2011 - 22:44
Made me stand up too...
sue dinum | December 10, 2011 - 00:45
Thanks a lot, Stan... glad you noticed.
sue
sue dinum | December 10, 2011 - 00:48
Yes, I know what you mean, scratch - nudge-nudge!
Thanks for reading and commenting.
sue
Leander42 | December 10, 2011 - 16:21
Phew!
Tissue please!
sue dinum | December 10, 2011 - 19:09
Hmm, I hope that means you liked it. Lean?
RachelPatricia | December 12, 2011 - 18:58
Oo-er, sue! 'belly magic' - that's what I'm going to call it from now on! ;)
Oh, and those opening lines are just perfect, by the way. Good choice of words indeed :)
Rachel xx
sue dinum | December 12, 2011 - 22:44
Yes, let's all make 'belly-magic' - sounds so much more respectable, doesn't it? Thanks very much for reading and commenting, Rachel.
sue
cynthiae77 | December 13, 2011 - 16:02
Wow, it just got really hot in here. I think I may need to crack a window!
sue dinum | December 13, 2011 - 19:36
And wow, to you too, cyn... I didn't realise my rambling could have that effect on anybody.
tarquin1 | December 22, 2011 - 18:35
Don't know what your taking Sue, but I want some.
I like your style.
sue dinum | December 22, 2011 - 19:39
And also thanks for reading and commenting on this one too, tarquin. Glad you liked it.
sue
Clive-Pearson | December 28, 2011 - 17:59
I have to admit I have no idea what a "Grass bug Woman God" is but from the sounds of it I should.
Don't happen to have her mobile number do you ?
sue dinum | December 29, 2011 - 11:26
Hi Clive, I'll see if I can dig it out for you... but I promise, she is some woman and you may find her too hot to handle. Best of luck!
Hope you had a good Cristmas by the way, and best wishes for the New Year.
sue
Denzella | December 30, 2011 - 17:38
Blimey, Sue, I need to go and lie down in a darkened room. The imagery is that powerful! Loved it!
sue dinum | December 30, 2011 - 22:27
Hi Denzella, yes I guess this one is a bit near the knuckle. I like to write gritty stuff now and again, and saucy (erotic), I find it kind of exorcises my demons.
Thanks very much once again... hope the lie-down did the trick.
sue
mycall | July 9, 2012 - 22:46
Great wording Trev, 'belly magic' like that phrase,Mike
sue dinum | July 9, 2012 - 22:52
Hi Mike, well fancy digging this one out after all this time. I'd forgotten about it, but many thanks for reading and your comment.
Trev