Making Love

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from the ABC set HOT LOVE POEMS

MAKING LOVE
She moves like some
grass bug woman
god naked from sex
sacrificing her heart
for one moist kiss
closed in my warm rhythm
stiff
wet
belly magic
a hard thrusting animal
squirming
in her
hot bone fever

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Comments

Stan | December 9, 2011 - 22:09

Mmm. Good choice of words, and striking images. Made me sit up and take notice, anyway...

scratch | December 9, 2011 - 22:44

Made me stand up too...

sue dinum | December 10, 2011 - 00:45

Thanks a lot, Stan... glad you noticed.

sue

sue dinum | December 10, 2011 - 00:48

Yes, I know what you mean, scratch - nudge-nudge!

Thanks for reading and commenting.

sue

Leander42 | December 10, 2011 - 16:21

Phew!
Tissue please!

sue dinum | December 10, 2011 - 19:09

Hmm, I hope that means you liked it. Lean?

RachelPatricia | December 12, 2011 - 18:58

Oo-er, sue! 'belly magic' - that's what I'm going to call it from now on! ;)

Oh, and those opening lines are just perfect, by the way. Good choice of words indeed :)

Rachel xx

sue dinum | December 12, 2011 - 22:44

Yes, let's all make 'belly-magic' - sounds so much more respectable, doesn't it? Thanks very much for reading and commenting, Rachel.

sue

cynthiae77 | December 13, 2011 - 16:02

Wow, it just got really hot in here. I think I may need to crack a window!

sue dinum | December 13, 2011 - 19:36

And wow, to you too, cyn... I didn't realise my rambling could have that effect on anybody.

tarquin1 | December 22, 2011 - 18:35

Don't know what your taking Sue, but I want some.
I like your style.

sue dinum | December 22, 2011 - 19:39

And also thanks for reading and commenting on this one too, tarquin. Glad you liked it.

sue

Clive-Pearson | December 28, 2011 - 17:59

I have to admit I have no idea what a "Grass bug Woman God" is but from the sounds of it I should.
Don't happen to have her mobile number do you ?

sue dinum | December 29, 2011 - 11:26

Hi Clive, I'll see if I can dig it out for you... but I promise, she is some woman and you may find her too hot to handle. Best of luck!

Hope you had a good Cristmas by the way, and best wishes for the New Year.

sue

Denzella | December 30, 2011 - 17:38

Blimey, Sue, I need to go and lie down in a darkened room. The imagery is that powerful! Loved it!

sue dinum | December 30, 2011 - 22:27

Hi Denzella, yes I guess this one is a bit near the knuckle. I like to write gritty stuff now and again, and saucy (erotic), I find it kind of exorcises my demons.

Thanks very much once again... hope the lie-down did the trick.

sue

mycall | July 9, 2012 - 22:46

Great wording Trev, 'belly magic' like that phrase,Mike

sue dinum | July 9, 2012 - 22:52

Hi Mike, well fancy digging this one out after all this time. I'd forgotten about it, but many thanks for reading and your comment.

Trev