The Rose

Succinct. Beautiful. Your images are so precise.

It's good Sue. I always crave this stuff, simple honest and well written.

Look at the second and third line and consider a punctuation to make the flow even better.

I see your point, Scratch... but I think the line break is punctuation enough. e e cummings comes to mind. I like the fact that the poem has no punctuation at all, so the thought and image flow uninterrupted.

On reflection I see that you are correct. Its strange how you see things differently on second sight.

That's generous, mate, thanks. I'm usually wrong with these things.

Sue, this is a superb poem. Much better than first read. I really applaude it.

And do you know what, forget my earlier comment.

thanks Stan

Thanks very much, scratch, for all your comments, I'm really chuffed you enjoyed it.

Best wishes.

sue

And thanks to you also, Stan, for some lovely comments. You and scratch have made my evening. Thanks for reading, so glad you enjoyed.

Best wishes.

sue

Ahh... it's not often I get to make someone's evening, so I'm glad to have been of service, Sue.

So beautiful, sue - a shot to the heart, this was :)

Rachel xx

Such a compliment from you, Rachel. I really appreciate it.

sue x

Just lovely!

Thanks very much, cyn.

sue

This is such a beautiful little vignette. Oh it so deserves a cherry.

Thanks very much, OTT, you are very generous. I will gladly accept a cherry from you as I only seem to get one about every two months from ABC. Thank you for reading and commenting.

sue

Thanks very much, OTT, you are very generous. I will gladly accept a cherry from you as I only seem to get one about every two months from ABC. Thank you for reading and commenting.

sue

Plain, simple and perfect. Read it over and over.

Thanks, tarquin, that is so generous of you.

Best wishes

sue

Sue,
This is lovely. I wish I could convey as much in so few words.

My mantra seems to be why use one word when ten will do.

So is mine when I get carried away, especially with the prose. Poetry forces one to crystalize things and that's why I like to try it now and again, but I've never considered myself a poet, I just think it is a wonderful discipline for practising economic use of words.

Many thanks for reading and your comment, Denzella.

sue

I agree whole heartedly with the last two comments.

Thanks for that, scratch.

By the way, scratch...

A Very Happy New Year to you!

sue

I thought this was such a tender, romantic poem,
it's short, but gets straight to the point.

By the way, Happy New Year to you.

Jenny.

Thanks very much for your lovely comment, Jenny, and a Happy New Year to you too.

Sue, you made every word count. Wonderful.

Thank you, shyrewode... glad you enjoyed it.

sue