My descent from grace
is slow; hesitant wings.
Life settles on me
like a wasp and stings.
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Jupiter | July 9, 2009 - 16:55
Ouch! Deliciously succinct ;-)
MistakenMagic | July 9, 2009 - 17:19
I always loved your mini-poems and this is no exception! Perhaps you could try a haiku?
Beeme | July 9, 2009 - 17:32
'Life settles on me
like a wasp and stings'
Very true line.
I really enjoyed this, it is beautifully written with great imagery x Well done :)
SundaysChild | July 9, 2009 - 19:32
Thanks for the comments guys. I have not done any of these little poems for a while now- but this just came to me after disposing of a wasp-corpse (poor thing lol) that I found on my window ledge.
Magic: I might try if I am feeling brave sometime lol- would be a completely new experience for me.
threeleafshamrock | July 10, 2009 - 09:12
I have read a lot of these short poems and this is one of the best. To make the content interesting and even make sense is hard - they are seldom this good. Love it; it is a skill and I look forward to more.
SundaysChild | July 10, 2009 - 15:41
Thanks 3leafshamrock :)
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