Of Crowns and Ashes

My attempt at a cross between Frank Herbert's Dune and Robert Jordan's (and Brandon Sanderson's) Wheel of Time. I just started working on this project [first draft :)] and, as I consider myself more of a poet than a writer, I would love any and all feedback. 

Of Crowns and Ashes (Chapter 1)

“When war is young, and red wind’s cloak burns, and the sun fallen from the clouds, he born alone on the seventh hour of the brightest day will claim...

On The Edge of Blades (Chapter 4.5)

The fire was green like the necklace that her mother had never worn. And, it was beautiful in a way. If only it would not burn. In the streets below...