Getting Worse-Help?
Wed, 2008-01-30 17:35
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Getting Worse-Help?
The last three chapters of my novel (an historical soap opera type) appear to be deteriorating in quality, to judge by the lack of cherries. I find it difficult to know what is wrong with them, however, being the writer, so as readers, does anyone have suggestions as to what is wrong with them/how to improve them and the book as a whole?
http://www.abctales.com/story/jacobea/chapter-fifteen-treasure
Much thanks for your time :)
tcook
Don't worry about the lack of cherries - these are transition chapters and are possibly needed once the next stage of the plot becomes apparent.
I think you should improve the characterisation in this section - we need to get inside the soul of the captain and of Flower as well as Florencia. We maybe need more background on them - not just what happened to them but how it affected them. Get into their heads and let us know what's in there!
_jacobea_
The focus is soon to shift onto Storm, and flower gets his due too, but i'll make sure i improve 'em in these when i re-write :)