Battle for sun love

By Kahdai

Tue, 28 Sep 2010
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3 comments
 

I
will know
you're my one
& come to you
when we've won
only then can I
tell you the one
to make into love
and when we're done
lying under new sky
to watch rise of sun.

Certificate PG
Poem
Love

Comments

Submitted by MistakenMagic on
Short and simple - but very beautiful, Kahdai. Just a couple of typos I spotted - 'your' should be 'you're' and 'were' should be 'we're'. Magic xxx

 

Submitted by Kahdai on
thanks very Magic! (agen ;) ) K xxx

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Kahdai on
Also think line 8 makes it PG lol...

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "