The hunter

Cherry

By Geertje Jong

Sat, 15 Jan 2011
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9 comments
 

Soft translucent mist
Wraps her silver arms
Around his jager coat

In the knee high meadow grass
He steps his boot shod feet
Leaves animal prints behind

His loneliness ribbons
Around the willows
Rooted to the rivers edge

Shadowing his tired eyes
Against the sunlight shards
Which slice through lofty crowns

To steal away his sight

Certificate 12
Poem
All that I am
Spiritual

Comments

Submitted by fatboy74 on
I like this.:-)

 

Submitted by Geertje Jong on
Thanks fatboy74!

Submitted by Beeme on
Extremely evocative imagery, I really enjoyed. Beeme xx

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Submitted by well-wisher on
The third and fourth stanza really stand out because of some of the wonderful language you use. "His loneliness ribbons" has a wonderful sound to it aswell as being a lovely, striking image (perhaps mirroring the soft translucent mist)and I also feel the same way about "sunlight shards" that "slice" through "lofty crowns". Generally, the poem succeeds in transporting me to "the knee high meadow grass" so I think it's a good poem. I

Oh look, a link. I wonder where it leads.

JoHn

Submitted by Geertje Jong on
It is very gratifying to read such a wonderful comment on The Hunter. Thank you for taking the time to read it well-wisher.

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
what an amazing poem, so much is shown to the reader, in such a short poem, you have managed to capture the hunter so well. Thanks for the read. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Geertje Jong on
Thank you skinner-jennifer, I am glad it captured your imganitaion. Geertje

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
Wonderful! Tina;-)

 

Submitted by Geertje Jong on
Thank you Tina ;)