A new day

Cherry

By Beeme

Sat, 22 Jan 2011
  • 2512 reads
14 comments
 

My ice- blue body
perfect before
the scarlet
sun thaws me

my bedroom readjusts
in the flurry of
snow-flake light,
flickering black
-brown outlines

a slipstream of
glistening golden light
admires my mirror
dances in its reflection

casting my washed-out
body onto a pastel skyline
each plume-blue-
love-scar dissolving with
the rising sun

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Comments

Submitted by ScoZen on
ScoZen Ahh, Bemme Another one of yours that I enjoy. Only don't thaw out to soon. Regards.
ScoZen

Submitted by fatboy74 on
Yes Beeme I agree with scozen, I also enjoyed this and am enjoying very much this style of poem (without sounding too much like an arse, I think they call it stream-of-consciousness). The 'plume blue love scar dissolving with the rising sun' is another brilliant ending to a very good poem of yours. :-)

 

Submitted by Insertponceyfre... on
me too Beeme. I'm really enjoying your colour themed poetry - wonderful imagery

 

Submitted by Beeme on
:-) awwh thank you ScoZen, I'll try not too :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you so very much Fatboy, you do not sound like an arse at all lol :) Yes, I think this would be a stream of consciousness poem I just looked it up ;) I enjoy writing these types of poems so I'm very glad that you get enjoyment from them too. Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you so much Insert! I'm glad you enjoyed :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
It's all been said, Beeme, except well done from me. Wonderful;-) Tina xx

 

Submitted by Beeme on
Thankyou, so very much Tina! :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by seashore on
Yes you go from strength to strength - you have a lovely `easy' style if you know what I mean, Beeme. It reads like that anyway.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you very much seashore :) I'm glad it reads that way ;-] This one was quite tricky to get right. Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you very much Sunday! :) Beeme xx

k.

Submitted by Kahdai on
I am glad if your scars finally dissolving, I did like the poems with them though xx K

"I will make sense with a few reads \^^/ "

Submitted by Beeme on
awwh hehe, thank you very much Kahdai. Glad you enjoyed them xx

k.

Submitted by Beeme on
Thank you for the cherry Abctales x

k.