I Wish...

Cherry

By lyssagurl_l0l

Fri, 02 Dec 2011
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I wish to be a black rose,
A strange, exotic beauty,
An outcast from all those.

I wish I was a notebook,
someone else controlling my emotions.
Maybe I wouldn`t be so shook.

I wish I was full of grace;
A godly, balanced, healthy girl,
Along with the pretty face.

I wish I could be a sweet kiss,
To fall upon your lips each night,
And make sure your swelling with bliss

I wish to be a tall, strong tree.
I`d give oxygen to lungs,
And let children climb on me.

I wish I was a small bird,
To fly with freedom and joy,
To be not only seen, but heard.

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Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there lyssagurl_101, I actually read this as a poem, even though you put it as a story. I really thought the sentiments behind this piece, were beautiful...especially:- I wish to be a tall, strong tree. I'd give oxygen to lungs, And let children climb on me. I wish I was a small bird, To fly with freedom and joy, To be not only seen, but heard. I love trees and birds, the two seem to go hand in hand and I think that more people should think like you. A stunning piece of writing. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there lyssagurl_101, I actually read this as a poem, even though you put it as a story. I really thought the sentiments behind this piece, were beautiful...especially:- I wish to be a tall, strong tree. I'd give oxygen to lungs, And let children climb on me. I wish I was a small bird, To fly with freedom and joy, To be not only seen, but heard. I love trees and birds, the two seem to go hand in hand and I think that more people should think like you. A stunning piece of writing. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there lyssagurl_101, I actually read this as a poem, even though you put it as a story. I really thought the sentiments behind this piece, were beautiful...especially:- I wish to be a tall, strong tree. I'd give oxygen to lungs, And let children climb on me. I wish I was a small bird, To fly with freedom and joy, To be not only seen, but heard. I love trees and birds, the two seem to go hand in hand and I think that more people should think like you. A stunning piece of writing. Jenny.

 

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi there lyssagurl_101, I actually read this as a poem, even though you put it as a story. I really thought the sentiments behind this piece, were beautiful...especially:- I wish to be a tall, strong tree. I'd give oxygen to lungs, And let children climb on me. I wish I was a small bird, To fly with freedom and joy, To be not only seen, but heard. I love trees and birds, the two seem to go hand in hand and I think that more people should think like you. A stunning piece of writing. Jenny.

 

Submitted by lyssagurl_l0l on
Thanks Jenny :) Your comment is much appreciated. By the way, I meant to put it as a poem. I`ll fix that ~:)alyssa(:~

~:)alyssa(:~

Submitted by Highhat on
Very good- Your= you're- 4th stanza last line