Oyster Bay
By Silver Spun Sand
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Mythical and gorgeous
Mythical and gorgeous escapism
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"...where the water’s as warm
"...where the water’s as warm as the sand is..."
I fell into the water recently and it was bloody freezing. My Oyster bag shrunk! Say no more.
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"and we’ll dive with the
"and we’ll dive with the dolphins under the sea
till we find the lost world of Atlantis;" I loved this line. I want to go there...
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A real mix of mythical,
A real mix of mythical, fantastical escape mixed with your eye for real delightful nature detail, which I suppose is what the IP is all about! Oh for the Day of escape from pain, pills and potions.
I was wondering about the last but one verse, last line whether you wanted 'soon' at the end to balance 'moon' [and concedes (that?) night’s stage will be (set?) soon.] or whether you felt that would come down to heavy on the beat? Rhiannon
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A delightful trip out of mind
A delightful trip out of mind and time!!!
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Just beautiful in words,
Just beautiful in words, pictures and emotion.
Lindy
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Soothing fantasy to dream of
Soothing fantasy to dream of forever - pill free, and pain free at the end of life's long day.
'Let’s go there, right now, down to Oyster Bay
where the sea paints a picture of dawn
with a palette of colours it stole from the sky
and we’ll watch as a new day is born.'
- How beautiful is that. And ----
'As the noon-tide wanes, we’ll comb the shore
sifting strands of a mermaid’s curls;
at the heart of a shiny, black diamond,
find our destiny wrapped in a pearl.'
it's breathtaking !
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Dear Tina,
Dear Tina,
you captured me with this magical poem...full of fantasy and those white stallions racing with the mist and turning into spray was captivating.
I feel as if I was there with you. Also loved the idea of diving with the dophins and searching for the lost city of Atlantis. So many beautiful features to this poem with your trademark. I think this is one of my favourites, up there with the poem about Camalot.
Very much enjoyed reading and thank you for sharing.
Jenny.
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