wet 6th july

Cherry

By Di_Hard

Tue, 07 Jul 2020
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8 comments
 

  

clouds secrete

clear, cold threads,

falling, coccoon

round tree limbs

shade flesh, lumens

an airy tingle of tall grass,

till rainbow orbs pool bodies in 

surprise of puddles'

spread light, flat

as moth wings, waiting

for the sun to fly

Certificate U
Poem

Comments

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on

What an imaginative way of describing what you are seeing Di. I love the idea of:-

till rainbow orbs pool bodies in

suprise of puddles

spread light flat

as moth wings

Very inspirng to read and beautifully mastered.

Jenny.

 

 

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou for wonderful, kind comment Jenny

 

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

The rain's journey from sky to puddle, vai varying metaphor! Rhiannon

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou very much for reading and commenting Rhiannon. A bit snippety for how much rain there was!

 

Submitted by Stephen Thom on

very pretty, lovely alliteration, hard 'c' sounds against the softer tingling air, pool bodies, beautifully crafted and always a joy to read

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou Stephen :0) It is lovely to think I might have "crafted"something as I am very clumsy :0)

 

Submitted by Stephen Thom on

Not with words! laugh

 

Submitted by Di_Hard on

Thankyou! Youy cannot know how much you have cheered me up :0)