single lens reflex by skinsen

Thanks for your observations. It is a piece about denial essentially... I am glad you found it understated. The dialogue in the first para and last paragraph do connect. They link previous conversations and conclusions between the couple. I think the man is still trying to convince himself all is well and perhaps it is his ex-wife who has the problem... Though there is a sadness there, maybe I should forgive the character for wanting to keep his son alive in some way???? Thanks anyway, your comments are most helpful. I am thinking of making this part of my faith, hope and charity trilogy...

Like Juliet I found this piece understated and beautifully written. I started the first sentence with assumptions that I was going to be reading a rather dull, autobiographical piece about someone's photography hobby and very nearly skimmed through the rest without giving it the attention it deserved. I'm really pleased that I didn't because if I had've done I would have missed out on a great read. Well done Skinsen.

What joy, camus.. thankyou. It is indeed a problem with unknown writers that often the trust to read on isn't there. I am glad you persevered and read on. I wrote it during a carnival outside a bar in eindhoven three years ago then lost it, as luck would have it, I found it yesterday - hoorah! Another beer is in order! By the way, I purposefully wrote the first few sentences short, almost staccato - it is intended to dis-arm. I was thinking about doing a 'return' after each sentence so they were stacked. Structurally it may look as if there is more to it than just a dull autobiog... (?)

there is a constant thread of thought that ties all my characters somehow. It is the abundences of novel material. I am working on a book (what a surprise), but I am trying to shed off the short story material with the novel fodder. Single lens reflex is semi-autobiographical, so I guess by default there will be more about these characaters in some form or other. I take on board what you say about the structure and this gives me the confidence to keep it as is. It is one reason why I didn't fiddle with the paragraphs and make then shorter and 'snappier'. It is almost a droning on effect of an anal bloke (not me I hasten to add, ho ho).