black stars and my obsession fire by lisa black

http://www.abctales.com/story/lisablack/black-stars-and-my-obsession-fire

i wasn't sure when i started this and some of the sentences clunk. But it kept my attention and thought the idea is certainly not a new one, this piece manages to offer a fresh take imo. There are some wonderful lines, often surprisingly perceptive or quirky, but it does need a heavy edit, sentence construction in particular gets in the way of what potentially could be an interesting story.

Juliet