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Room For Two - #1 A story in the first person 928 words
Nearly listed this as 'other fiction' to avoid the exposure. But as a writer everything we write exposes something of us. Honest and constructive feedback always welcome
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Bright Lights / Dark shadows PT 2 of Bright Lights Posted 14th Dec
At first she had been happy to be swept along in the wake of his presence, intense, charming, amusing, mysterious and he wanted her. FEEDBACK PLEASE - OR WHAT'S THE POINT ?
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Jarj's Day - Of Machines and Magic - Prologue
He didn’t hear the blow coming,he felt it.His reaction was instinctive,imprinted through generation’s of training.He tucked into a ball as the strange heavy bladed weapon whistled in the air
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Mr Justabout - Version 4 - 1263 words
Version 1 Critqued in WF #85 Oct as to long & to descrptive / wordy. Version 1 posted earlier
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Mr Justabout - Version 1 - 3700 words
Critiqued in WF October #85. Version Two and three followed but Version 4 posted. If these stories are to long for this format - feedback please.
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