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New Frock
Inspired to write this by Jenny.
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In Passing
A poem for my friend Stephen Ward - AKA the poet - mangothechutneyman
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Fascination
Intent upon the light..
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In Case You Don't Remember
Another on my Beach theme
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The picture tells a big story
Posted on Wed, 17 Jun 2015
The picture tells a big story, love how you caught the moment and froze it at the end. I was fascinated by the ambiguity of the ending. Could mean a sharply remembered moment, or as the glass, moth and dog - possibly not remembered... Too much...
Read full commentPosted in The Hand that Takes the Picture
Frustration and inner turmoil
Posted on Wed, 17 Jun 2015
Frustration and inner turmoil. Lots of it.
Read full commentPosted in Stuck in Checkmate
It is wonderful. Not a
Posted on Thu, 11 Jun 2015
It is wonderful. Not a criticism, but I was looking hard because you asked us to and with a great effort at nit picking, I thought that in this line - 'the sharp piercing of thorns' - 'sharp' might not be needed. It might be, though. I just felt...
Read full commentPosted in Loathsome (Poetry Monthly)
Really liked this - and that
Posted on Wed, 10 Jun 2015
Really liked this - and that 'unsettling' (as Philip said) after-feeling. It's probably just me, but this line feels a bit awkward to me. - 'which I yawn out to relieve' Its a good description, but maybe it's the order of it - just doesnt sit...
Read full commentPosted in On Comedown Hill
I like the new title. Still
Posted on Mon, 08 Jun 2015
I like the new title. Still love the scarf flirting with the breeze memory. I might be wrong, but this feels briefer - yet even more vivid in those unfading memories.
'I recall her sister’s red scarf flirting
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Posted in The Weatherman said...
There's anxiety in this and
Posted on Fri, 05 Jun 2015
There's anxiety in this and loss; a longing in the slipping away. The coldness and fluidity add to the movement - everything leaving, but there's coldness, too, in the almost scientific description - like an unwilling acceptance of death. Filled...
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'We find an icon shop on the
Posted on Thu, 04 Jun 2015
'We find an icon shop on the edge of a pilgrimage village
which we are in quite by accident.' - seems important because being there by chance means they are not there because of desperation - eg.
'In the fountain, a scattering of...
Read full commentPosted in On the day you were made
This is on fire. Lots if real
Posted on Thu, 04 Jun 2015
This is on fire. Lots if real emotion. You turn repression into a drug. Brilliant!
Read full commentPosted in Repression
Insert, I was in stitches
Posted on Tue, 02 Jun 2015
Insert, I was in stitches reading what you said, from finding nothing, to the dreaded thought of not only listening, but them thinking you were the sort of person to like Neil Diamond. Funnily enough, I turned down the offer of music, too. I just...
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What a longing is expressed
Posted on Thu, 28 May 2015
What a longing is expressed here! Wordless communication to last a lifetime, and the possibility it could have a lifelong impact on both sides is something only a child could appreciate, I think, at least until we close our minds and feel...
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