Opinion wanted
Wed, 2004-09-08 14:45
#1
Opinion wanted
Let me know what you guys think of this one...........
There by the red dawn sun
Lies Lifes truths
Burning like Time
By my front window
In youth seen in age
Inconsistent
and
InRealTime
Falls face flat
Found
Dead
No woman nor man
Goes by that name
Yet by that red
street corner
Lie dreams
In the gutter
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Rokkitnite
It should be 'lie lives truths', since it's plural. This sounds like the stuff you hear read out in an oh-so-earnest way by Americans at poetry slams.
Rokkitnite
Hang on... just reread what I wrote. I was wrong. Oops. It should be 'lies life's truths'. Sorry.