First Words by Sporky

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Thu, 2006-01-26 03:25

http://www.abctales.com/node/548559

This is my second story submitted to this site. It's a tale of the first manned mission to Mars and what the first words spoken on its surface will be. I would very much like some feedback and criticism.

Thu, 2006-01-26 03:37

rokkitnite

Hi Sporky! Welcome to abctales. Your best bet if you want feedback on your work is to read lots of other people's work and start threads about pieces you like, giving feedback on what you thought worked and what you think could be improved. Then people will start to read your work and ultimately feedback on what you've done. It's kind of like a pyramid scheme except you won't get rich at the end of it.

Thu, 2006-01-26 03:56

Foster

that's the most amicable response to such a request i've ever seen. well said, rokkitnite. welcome to abc, sporky!

Thu, 2006-01-26 04:09

southern belle

Hi Sporky, and welcome! I just reread your story, it's awesome! I especially loved how you closed it. ^_^ You're descriptions were awesome, as always. It was wonderfully written, and again, I loved the end. Hope to see more work from you soon!

Thu, 2006-01-26 04:15

Sporky

Thanks to everyone. Thank you to rokkitnite for the friendly advice and the welcome and thanks to foster for the welcome. Thanks for the comments, Southern Belle. Forgive my bumbling start to this place. Still getting the hang of this place *embarassed*. Thanks for the advice once again.

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