Whoop whoop by Onlywords.

http://www.abctales.com/story/onlywords/whoop-whoop Here's the link.

the premise is original and i love the bout of whooping - some sentences jarred a little, and it needs a tidy up with grammar and spelling, however the pace is good and it ends with a chuckle. this made me laugh, 'Miss Kennedy my infants teacher would say ‘that’s enough Stanley Evans there’s no need to be overly appreciative , Sandra Muggins has only put the top back on the glue,' '(The nations most trusted Man Of Colour – a round of applause for that Trev) sums up the serious Trev Monday night issue with a particularly moving' this sentences jars, and refs. to man of colour a little dated and dare i say it derogatory. 'Collette Adams my first serious girlfriend (Body by Rolls Royce Brains By Mattell)' not sure the brackets work for me, again i find the comment derogatory and it makes me question the attitude of the author rather than the character of Stanley. and, Sandra Rosenblatt (Brains by Stephen Hawking body by British Leyland Trucks) ditto. but it has lots of potential, great read, ty. Juliet

I think the end of your lines have been deleted on here, which makes reading a little difficult, but a nice twist at the end.....and there was me thinking it was tourettes....

Thank you all for your comments some of which contained typos complaining about typos which made me laugh. A big thank you and I'm glad you enjoyed - I look forward t reading your work soon. Proof that I'm a pudding I'd love the luxury of a proof reader and editor - anybody out there? Ged

The only voice is that of Stanley (remember the poor lad had fish thrown at him) Real people can't be original all the time Stanley is just telling us what he knows. the suggestion of it being derogatory to Trev is a bit harsh. Stanley says good night to him when he finishes the news and wishes Trev was his uncle. big ups top Trev remember ged