What is this?

I would probably classify it as a poem.

"BUT I tried to write it with structure. Does that make it a poem." That makes it an attempt at a poem but I think it would work better as prose. The sentences generally work, or would work, as prose and the line breaks aren't really doing anything much in terms of rhthym.

In the end, 'poem' and 'story' are only words to help us organise the things we experience, and you can write pieces that could sneak into both categories. So there's no definitive answer to your question. What I'd say is that if you invite readers to read it as poem (by calling it a poem, or by placing it in the context of, say, a poetry collection) then you're inviting a greater degree of scrutiny with regards to the form and the language used. If you invite them to read it as a story, then they might, in turn, expect a bolder narrative structure.

Nice, interesting. I find poetry a difficult thing to come to terms with. I don't like to read poetry. But sometimes I attempt to write it. It never does anything.

it sure is a poem.... ~LiVe...LoVe...LaUgH~

It seems that way. I like the idea of a Prose Poem. I think ill clasify it as 'something I wrote'. :)

"I find poetry a difficult thing to come to terms with. I don't like to read poetry. But sometimes I attempt to write it. It never does anything." This isn't really surprising, is it? If you don't read poetry, it hard to imagine how you'd be able to tell if it was doing anything or not. What basis would you be judging it on? Why don't you like reading poetry?

No, not supprising. But what I do find supprising is that I sometimes want to write them. I suppose I was not speaking fully truth when I said they do nothing. Sometimes I am pleased with the result. However I am just attempting to be clever. If I belive I have managed to stick to my self imposed rules, then it is a success. I am judging it by what I set out to do. I don't read poetry because I get no enjoyment out of it. I don't know why. I don't like looking at paintings much either. Figurative ones especially.

Well, I imagine you might want to write poems because you get an urge to express something in a short piece of writing. I suppose whether or not you enjoy poetry might depend on what you're expecting to get out of it and how you're reading the poems. The poems that I like most are sometimes ones which I have to read four or five times and then think about for a bit before I get anything much out of them. It's a different process to reading a novel or a newspaper or magazine.

I suppose if you took someone who doesn't enjoy TV or film and you gave someone an expensive set of cameras, some cool film sets and a brace of pretty actors, they'd still get creating. In the same way, because the tools for poetry are always to hand, plenty of people will get the urge to write it, whether or not they read it. The big myth with poetry, in my opinion, is that it's necessarily more difficult than other forms of art. It isn't, really. Plenty of poetry is immediately accessible and enjoyable. It's just that we take for granted the skills that enable us to digest novels, TV and other communicative material without any trouble. We pick them up through constant exposure from a young age, to the point where it feels we aren't doing anything - the medium is entertaining us. Read enough poetry and a similar thing starts to happen. Poetry *could* be popular - it's easy to see people reading it on the tube, or at bus stops, or over a coffee. It's short, it's distracting and it's (often) neat and pretty. It's readily available with a great variety on offer. People just aren't familar enough with it. It's only like the difference between being good enough at guitar to enjoy sitting there and playing about with one and being a beginner who has to furrow his brow to form a G.