pleez rate my story

Learn how to spell?

Wonderful story saurajit. Seems as though that story has been written a good many times though. I loved the atmoshpere, but thought that you hinted a little too much that he was allready dead when the Maid awoke and said "I wish the master was still here," or something to that affect and the master gives an "odd" smile. I deffinetly say cut out the "odd" but I would think that it is still fairly obvious that he is the dead master. There are also a few grammatical errors that you need to go over but you are on the right track. I'd give it: 3/5 for grammer 5/5 for atmoshpere 2/5 for originality and 3/5 for character developement. 13/20 Good work i'd love to read more of your writing.

Fuck! 0/10! One basic rule for every story! As anyone read ur story, it should help them to masturbate! I am searious, no kidding! A 10/10 story when thaught abt should allow u to cum! sorry but ur story is abs. shit!saurajit wrote:

Learn how to spell. Seriously. If you want help with writing, that's my suggestion. Oh, and description is what readers love. :-D -brianna

Good job on the description, but perhaps there was too much. (Sorry, I hadn't read your story in the last comment.) I don't think there was much of a point to the story, you kind of ended really quickly with Mr. and Mrs. White buying the house (sort of). Also, you need to work on grammar. Make a new paragraphs with a new speaker or new idea. -Brianna

i must be really dumb, but i can't find spelling mistakes. could you please point them out, thank you. just for reference, i spell the british way, so colour, not color, etc etc. thanks briana, but i really didn't mean the story to have a point, i just wrote it for the fun of it.

surajit where exactly is ur story? i cant find it. [%sig%]

sally, it's on the second page in the stories section of the public gallery. u can search for saurajit, and u'll get it. could, u also tcheck out the seed of sarothen - just above my short story. thanx a bunch!

to tell u the truth there really is a lot of description in your story.But i liked the ending though. i think i will give u maybe 6 out of 10. i haven't read your other story but i will let u know what i think as soon as i read it. [%sig%]

thank you

A quick tip: when you want someone to take you seriously, make sure to use correct grammar and spelling. You saw how mississippi and Brianna reacted, and it was because you titled the thread "pleez rate my story". I don't know how it is in the UK, but over here we have a connotation of unrespectability about poor spelling... *coughGuy_tintincough*... and tend to ignore everything they say.

hey i read the first part of your story, the other day and it was interesting but now when i want to read the second part, its gone. did you delete it? [%sig%]

no sally i haven't deleted it. chapter 2 is on the first page of stories but way down: http://www.abctales.com/Members/saurajit/abcset.2005-02-04.0842320064/do... chapter 3 is in the stories section but quite a bit up in the list so u shoouldn't have trouble finding it! tell me how u liked it!

that story is interesting and i liked it very much and i esp loved the style of your writing but you know why it took me so long to answer......it was hard for me to get myself reading but once i started reading i started liking it. i dont know.. there is something in that story that tells you to keep reading it but at the same time something makes it seem boring. oh, i dont know but i liked the story and its very interesting

i know!!! that's why i posted on this site so many times, trying to get tips to eliminate that kind of monotonous tone the story has! thanks to some tips, i've decided to write out the whole story, at least a major chunk, and then revise it to include much more mystery and intrigue. i'll be posting the 4th chapter soon. thanks again for replying!

tell me when u have finished the 4th chapter [%sig%]

Here's the fourth chapter. And this is sure to get you interested: http://www.abctales.com/Members/saurajit/abcset.2005-02-04.0842320064/do...

its very interesting and i liked the ending of this chapter, it made me laugh(though it was'nt so funny) :-) I think this ch was better than the others. [%sig%]

oh, sorry forgot to change name it was me sally

borrring make it sound funny you'v got to catch peoples eye