Fragments
Fri, 2006-01-27 08:36
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Fragments
This was terrible from start to finish with lots of silly lines about nothing. There is a penchant for poets to attempt to marry psychology with romantic imagery and it often fails. Again, just my own personal view, so please do not be offended.
camus
http://www.abctales.com/story/jvriesema/fragments
Edgar, it is usually more appropriate to use this forum to give constructive crit rather than to say something is terrible...or, alternatively do what most others do...if you don't like something don't comment!
Edgar_Whitter
I was being constructive, it still was a poor piece of nonsense however. Velvet Underground's 'Black Angel's Death Song' is a great song musically but lyrically its rubbish say compared to one of Lou Reed's story songs
Foster
i'm in total disagreement. maybe its not the best poem in the world, but its certainly not a "piece of nonsense." it conjured up of nice images for me and i liked it very much.
fergal
I guess 'constructive' usually means suggestions on how to better something, or make it work, rather than saying you don't like it. We all have our own tastes, but we all like to encourage all writers to improve, and enjoy the process. Also, while I may not consider this a great poem very muchI liked
Then,
the seagulls buried their heads into the strength of their own wings,
and clung to the lights of the fishing boats that were running marathons to the shore.
That is a nice image and it works very well.
Edgar_Whitter
I can only apologise. However I did state that it was my personal view. People shouldn't be hood-winked with false praise. If somebody hates something of my mine I do not ask why they hate it, i accept it and move on. Sorry if I have caused any upset or offence, it was not intentional at all. I just thought it was a bad poem. You don't need to de-construct a McDonald's burger to know that its bad.
fergal
ah, but a McDonald's burger is oh so tasty...
I agree that people should most definitely not be hoodwinked with false praise. But there is such a thing supportive and useful critique, without either hoodwinking or dismissing - if one was writing an essay for University for example, one would have to explain why it was a bad poem, rather than just stating its badness. Hating something is quite a strong word - and there are a variety of levels of talent on this site.
Also there is no such thing as universal taste, just personal taste, and I do see you were indicating your personal taste - but how useful a negative response is without helpful suggestions is debatable.
But I wasn't trying to get in an argument about it, and am looking forward to reading more of your work.
Now, who's for a burger?